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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? v.4

Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? v. 4
In the past, it was a natural step that a couple would get married fairly young, and then start a family. However, this is no longer the case and the delaying of childbirth is becoming very common. This essay will consider the reasons for this trend and the possible effects on families and society. The driving force behind this trend is changing employment patterns. As more women have pursued an education and entered the workforce, they tend to marry later and have children later in their life. This is unavoidable in many cases because women cannot combine family and work well due to costly childcare. Another factor is all the other opportunities available to everyone. For example, many men and women choose to travel around the world or take the chance to work in another country, thus delaying settling down. There are a number of possible impacts on families and society. Firstly, with regards to families, it can be more difficult for older women to get pregnant and they may experience more health problems, such as a miscarriage, high blood pressure or diabetes, during pregnancy. Also, the parents may find the whole experience of bringing up children more tiring if they are older. In one respect it may be positive for society because if people are choosing to work for longer, a country will have a productive workforce. On the negative side though, in the long-term falling fertility rates will mean an aging population with a lack of young people to work and take care of the elderly. In conclusion, there are several reasons that people are having children later in life, and this can have a number of impacts, both positive and negative. Given the fact that society continues to change, this trend is likely to continue well into the future.
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, this is no longer the case and the delaying of childbirth is becoming
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common. This essay will consider the reasons for this trend and the possible effects on
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families
and society.

The driving force behind this trend is changing employment patterns. As more
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women
have pursued an education and entered the workforce, they tend to marry later and have children later in their life. This is unavoidable in
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many
cases
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because
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women
cannot combine
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family
and
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well due to costly childcare. Another factor is all the other opportunities available to everyone.
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men
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choose to travel around the world or take the chance to
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work
in another country,
thus
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There are a number of possible impacts on
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families
and society.
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, it can be more difficult for older
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pregnant and
they may experience more health problems, such as a miscarriage, high blood pressure or diabetes, during pregnancy.
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positive
for society
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are choosing to
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for longer, a country will have a productive workforce. On the
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negative
side though, in the long-term falling fertility rates will mean an aging population with a lack of young
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to
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and take care of the elderly.

In conclusion
, there are several reasons that
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people
are having children later in life, and this can have a number of impacts, both
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positive
and
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negative
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the fact that society continues to
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, this trend is likely to continue well into the future.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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