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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.3

Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. v. 3
Most educational institutions encourage students to indulge in teams since it helps in better growth on individual as well as social development. Group activities improve few essential qualities such as confidence, creativity and decision making. On the other end few scholars prefer to go solo. However, there are community who prefer that scholars should involve with groups and I agree with their opinion. Moving to the side there are scholars who unite together to form groups. They are observed that they achieve their goals productively. Due to different perspective of people existing in the team, many ideas come into the table while brainstorming. If one got stuck with a huddle, then there are others to solve the matter, thus guides them to improve the productivity and checks time balance for the given assignment. For instance, in a mathematics assignment suppose one is good in geometry and other in trigonometry, hence supporting the other kind. Unity also helps oneself in upgrading skills by learning or practising from the others in the crew. On the other side, there are individual who completes work single handedly. Hence the radius for brainstorming is confined or limited. This can mostly represent that the scholar is an introvert who is less confident to confront his thinking or views with others resulting in to finish the task all by himself which may conclude to degrade the level of overall performance. For example, a member has strong ideas but is unable to confront others due to his shy behaviour. Many teenagers do not like to share success credits with others while few fail to fit for the team due to lack of sufficient or required skills, can be substitute cases for acting separately. In a nutshell, from my opinion scholars should be motivated to work in groups rather than solo, Afterall teamwork is the basic requirement in any work field as nothing can be achieved singly. Not only the institute even parents should encourage them to unite to achieve any job requirements.
Most educational institutions encourage students to indulge in teams since it
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helps
in better growth on individual
as well
as social development.
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Group
activities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
few essential qualities such as confidence, creativity and
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decision making
. On the
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other
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end
few
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scholars
prefer to go solo.
However
, there are community
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who
prefer that
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scholars
should involve with
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groups
and I
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agree
with their opinion.

Moving to the side there are
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scholars
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who
unite together to form
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groups
. They
are observed
that they achieve their goals
productively
. Due to
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different
perspective of
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people
existing in the team,
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many
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ideas
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come
into the table while brainstorming. If one
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got
stuck with a huddle, then there are others to solve the matter,
thus
guides them to
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improve
the productivity and
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checks
time balance for the
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given
assignment.
For instance
, in a mathematics assignment suppose one is
Use "good at" to mean "skilled" with school subjects. Try this: "good at geometry".
good in geometry
and
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other
in trigonometry,
hence
supporting the
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other
kind. Unity
also
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helps
oneself in upgrading
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skills
by learning or
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practising
from the others in the crew.

On the
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other
side, there are
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individual
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who
completes work single
handedly
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
the radius for brainstorming
is confined
or limited. This can
mostly
represent that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scholar
is an introvert
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
is less confident to confront his thinking or views with others resulting in to finish the task all by himself which may conclude to degrade the level of
overall
performance.
For example
, a member has strong
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
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but
is unable to confront others due to his shy
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behaviour
.
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Many
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teenagers
do not like to share success credits with others while
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few fail
to fit for the team due to lack of sufficient or required
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skills
, can be substitute cases for acting
separately
.

In a nutshell, from my opinion
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scholars
should
be motivated
to work in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
rather
than solo,
Did you mean "after all"?
Afterall
teamwork is the basic requirement in any work field as nothing can
be achieved
singly
. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the institute even parents should encourage them to unite to achieve any job requirements.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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