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Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. Some people believe this cannot be changes while others feel that we can still take action protect living things and the environment. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. v.1

Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. Some people believe this cannot be changes while others feel that we can still take action protect living things and the environment. v. 1
Human being actions have had a detrimental impact on the environment and the living beings on our planet. A large section of society support that ecosystem preservation can be done by monitoring the repercussions of our activities, whereas others oppose this. Firstly, I will discuss why people feel they can no longer help living things and the local environment, and secondly, I will describe what actions people are taking to benefit the natural world. Many people feel that environmental degradation increases due to rapid growth in industrialization in many parts of the world. Although, it has helped in rapid growth of developing economies, large quantity of waste is also produced by them. For example, some Asian countries produce goods for different parts of the globe, which in turn creates pollution, but also provide employment for the large section of society. Another reason people find themselves helpless to help the Earth is due to rising population levels. It becomes difficult to provide basic amenities without harming the ecosystem. Consequently, people become careless to preserve other living organisms. On the contrary, there are many people who agree that we can still protect our environmental bodies by using renewable energy and resources. Solar power is one such example that has no negative effect on the natural world. To exemplify, if we could use more natural energy resources, we can generate more power and electricity without impacting natural habitats. Moreover, many countries, such as India, are also now restricting the use of plastic bags. As a result, India’s cities and wildlife have become healthier and cleaner. To conclude, it is crystal clear that we are facing many challenges in protecting the natural surroundings. In my opinion, I strongly contend about ensuring the safety and life cycle of our planet, and feel that governments worldwide should make this their top priority.
Human being actions have had a detrimental impact on the environment and the living beings on our planet. A large section of society support that ecosystem preservation can
be done
by monitoring the repercussions of our activities, whereas others oppose this.
Firstly
, I will discuss why
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people
feel they can no longer
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help
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living
things and the local environment, and
secondly
, I will
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describe
what actions
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people
are taking to benefit the
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natural
world.

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Many
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people
feel that environmental degradation increases due to rapid growth in industrialization in
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many
parts of the world. Although, it has
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helped
in rapid growth of developing economies, large quantity of waste is
also
produced by them.
For example
,
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some
Asian countries produce
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goods
for
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different
parts of the globe, which in turn creates pollution,
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but
also
provide employment for the large section of society. Another reason
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people
find themselves helpless to
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help
the Earth is due to rising population levels. It becomes difficult to provide basic amenities without harming the ecosystem.
Consequently
,
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people
become careless to preserve other living organisms.

On the contrary
, there are
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many
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people
who
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agree
that we can
still
protect our environmental bodies by using renewable energy and resources. Solar power is one such example that has no
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negative
effect on the
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natural
world. To exemplify, if we could
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use
more
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natural
energy resources, we can generate more power and electricity without impacting
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natural
habitats.
Moreover
,
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many
countries, such as India, are
also
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now
restricting the
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use
of plastic bags.
As a result
, India’s cities and wildlife have become healthier and cleaner.

To conclude
, it is crystal
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clear
that we are facing
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many
challenges in protecting the
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natural
surroundings. In my opinion, I
strongly
contend about ensuring the safety and life cycle of our planet, and feel that
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governments
worldwide should
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make
this their top priority.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. Some people believe this cannot be changes while others feel that we can still take action protect living things and the environment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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