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Many governments think that the econimic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v.2

Many governments think that the econimic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 2
Different countries believe that it is important to focus on economic growth, while other people prefer other forms of growth. This essay will discuss the importance of economic growth as compared to other forms of growth. The economy is the backbone of any nation. That is as the economy grows, so do opportunities for employment and income growth. Stronger labour markets and higher income levels tend to help those families living in poverty move above poverty threshold. Furthermore, economic growth will help social problems, such as crime rate, communicable disease and improvements of life expectancy of people. The strength of an economy lead to a health nation. Whilst a crippling economy is a distress to the citizens, as well as the governments. Therefore, growth in the economy brings relief and mental stability. For example, people living in a struggling economy are at high risk of developing heart attacks or psychiatric conditions due to stressors of the economy. However, the peace of a nation plays a huge role apart from the economic growth. That is, there are some countries which are well-developed, though they experience civil unrest. It is crucial for the government to focus on increasing growth in security system. For example, recently in America they are people, who were shot dead in the city of New Jersey. This was due to poor security progression in a country with high levels of economic growth. In conclusion, the benefits of economic growth outweighs the drawbacks of types of progressions. Economic growth is advantageous, as it reduces a number of communicable diseases, increases employment opportunities and economic growth. Which will in turn solve other forms of progression such as social growth, environmental and political growth.
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economic
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growth
, while
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other
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people
prefer
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other
forms of
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growth
. This essay will discuss the importance of
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economic
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growth
as compared to
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other
forms of
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growth
. The
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economy
is the backbone of any nation.
That is
as the
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economy
grows,
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so
do opportunities for employment and income
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growth
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markets and higher income levels tend to
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help
those families living in poverty
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move
above poverty threshold.
Furthermore
,
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economic
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growth
will
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help
social problems, such as crime rate, communicable disease and improvements of life expectancy of
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people
.

The strength of an
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economy
lead to a health nation. Whilst a crippling
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economy
is a distress to the citizens,
as well
as the
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governments
.
Therefore
,
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growth
in the
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economy
brings relief and mental stability.
For example
,
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people
living in a struggling
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economy
are at high
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risk
of developing heart attacks or psychiatric conditions due to stressors of the economy.

However
, the peace of a nation plays a huge role apart from the
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economic
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growth
.
That is
, there are
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some
countries which are well-developed, though they experience civil unrest. It is crucial for the
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government
to focus on increasing
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growth
in security system.
For example
, recently in America they are
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people
, who
were shot
dead in the city of New Jersey. This was due to poor security progression in a country with high levels of
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economic
growth.

In conclusion
, the benefits of
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economic
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growth
outweighs the drawbacks of types of progressions.
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Economic
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growth
is advantageous, as it
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reduces
a number of communicable diseases, increases employment opportunities and
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economic
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growth
. Which will in turn solve
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other
forms of progression such as social
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growth
, environmental and political
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growth
.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many governments think that the econimic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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