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Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that good social skills is as important as good qualifications to succeed in job? v.2

Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. that good social skills is as important as good qualifications to succeed in job? v. 2
Employers look for some qualities in an employee at the time of recruitment. Some people claim that a well qualified employee must also possess good social skills in order to be successful in the workplace. I completely agree with this statement, because a qualified worker who is social can create a happy environment and healthy competition at work. Firstly, the working environment must be happy in order to achieve success. An employee with good interpersonal skills will share some productive thoughts with Co workers. The colleagues will be happy to discuss freely and put in their views as well. In addition, they take a break for a cup of coffee or tea where they talk about general matters other than work. Moreover, nowadays there are cultural clubs at offices and an employee, who is social can take part in singing during some office celebrations. Therefore, it will cut down the stress levels in the workplace and enhance their efficiency in job. For instance, a research conducted by Havard university noted that 80% of the doctors who are socially inactive are unhappy, although they are efficient professionally. Secondly, these workers with good social skills are not only competitive but they also create a healthy competition among colleagues. A company can progress, only if the employees are competitive. So, there must be a healthy competition among workers. In other words, some creative idea by an employee must be encouraged and honestly appreciated by everyone. Further, this motivates themselves to put in extra efforts to achieve success in their careers. For example, in certain software companies the best employee of the month is chosen by other workers and not the employer. In conclusion, even though employers must consider many qualities before hiring an employee, two most important ones are qualified and good social skills to be considered. Because, the working environment needs to have healthy competition and happiness, so that it can progress.
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qualities in an
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employee
at the time of recruitment.
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people
claim that a well qualified
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employee
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must
also
possess
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good
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social
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skills
in order to be successful in the workplace. I completely
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agree
with this statement,
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because
a qualified
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worker
who is
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social
can create a happy environment and
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healthy
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competition
at work.

Firstly
, the working environment
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must
be happy in order to achieve success. An
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employee
with
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good
interpersonal
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skills
will share
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some
productive thoughts with Co
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workers
. The colleagues will be happy to discuss
freely
and put in their views
as well
.
In addition
, they take a break for a cup of coffee or tea where they talk about general matters other than work.
Moreover
, nowadays there are cultural clubs at offices and an
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employee
, who is
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social
can
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take part
in singing during
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some
office celebrations.
Therefore
, it will
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cut
down the
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stress
levels in the workplace and enhance their efficiency in job.
For instance
,
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a research
conducted by
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Havard
university noted that 80% of the doctors who are
socially
inactive are unhappy, although they are efficient
professionally
.

Secondly
, these
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workers
with
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good
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social
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skills
are not
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only
competitive
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but
they
also
create a
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healthy
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competition
among colleagues. A
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company
can progress,
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only
if the
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employees
are competitive.
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, there
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must
be a
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healthy
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competition
among
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workers
.
In other words
,
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some
creative
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idea
by an
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employee
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must
be encouraged
and
honestly
appreciated by everyone.
Further
, this motivates themselves to put in extra efforts to achieve success in their careers.
For example
, in certain software
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companies
the best
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employee
of the month
is chosen
by other
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workers
and not the employer.

In conclusion
,
even though
employers
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must
consider
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qualities
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before
hiring an
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employee
, two most
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important
ones
are qualified
and
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good
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social
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skills
to
be considered
.
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Because
, the working environment needs to have
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healthy
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competition
and happiness,
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so
that it can progress.
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IELTS essay Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. that good social skills is as important as good qualifications to succeed in job? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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