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Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that good scial skills are as important as good qualifications to succeed a job. v.1

Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. that good scial skills are as important as good qualifications to succeed a job. v. 1
Nowadays, more and more recruiters are looking for potential candidates whose possess interpersonal skills and excellent educational background. I totally agree with the view that soft skills are equally important as education levels. There are two main reasons why social skills are vital for employees to build a successful career. First, social skills help one connect better with his coworkers, clients, and boss because they know how to hold conversations and connect positively with others. Since workers have to interact with managers, coworkers and customers on the daily basis, therefore a staff who has strong social skills knows how to persuade the clients to use the company service as well as to be a good team player and be a supportive coworker. This helps get the job done faster, more efficiently and cost effectively which can in turn lead to job outcomes. For example, a sale person possessing effective negotiation skills have a better chance to close the deal with his customers than his coworker who have social skill deficit. Second, a candidate who shows social skills leaves an impression on the recruiters than one who does not. Nowadays, where the job market is becoming increasingly competitive and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for a single position in a company. Hence, only those that have both good communication skills as well as required qualifications will win this competition over those who have weak personal skills. In conclusion, it is of high importance for everyone to acquire adequate skills beyond academic or technical knowledge.
Nowadays, more and more recruiters are looking for potential candidates whose possess interpersonal
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and excellent educational background. I
totally
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with the view that soft
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are
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important
as education levels.

There are two main reasons why
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social
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are vital for employees to build a successful career.

First
,
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one connect better with his
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coworkers
, clients, and boss
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because
they know how to hold conversations and connect
positively
with others. Since workers
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have to
interact with managers,
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coworkers
and customers on the daily basis,
therefore
a staff
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who
has strong
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social
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skills
knows how to persuade the clients to
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use
the
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company
service
as well
as to be a
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good
team player and be a supportive
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coworker
. This
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helps
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get
the job done faster, more
efficiently
and cost
effectively
which can in turn lead to job outcomes.
For example
, a sale person possessing effective negotiation
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skills
have a better chance to close the deal with his customers than his
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coworker
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who
have
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social
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skill
deficit.

Second, a candidate
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who
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shows
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social
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leaves
an impression on the recruiters than one
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who
does not. Nowadays, where the job market is becoming
increasingly
competitive and
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sometimes
there are hundreds of applicants for a single position in a
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company
.
Hence
,
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only
those that have both
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good
communication
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skills
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as well as
required qualifications will win this competition over those
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who
have weak personal
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skills
.

In conclusion
, it is of high importance for everyone to acquire adequate
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skills
beyond academic or technical knowledge.
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IELTS essay Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. that good scial skills are as important as good qualifications to succeed a job. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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