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Many country encourage tourism. Does it bring advantages or disadvantages? v.1

Many country encourage tourism. Does it bring advantages or disadvantages? v. 1
In recent decades, low cost airfare has made international travel easier and many countries have, therefore, developed their tourism industries into key sectors of their economies. While it is clear tourism brings obvious benefits to the countries that host tourists, it is also true to say it may bring disadvantages as well. Undoubtedly, there are significant benefits that tourism brings to a country. First, a thriving tourist industry implies an increasing need for a variety of services such as hotels, transport, restaurants, and entertainment. This results in a considerable number of jobs being created for people who lack a college education and also the development of the infrastructure needed to accommodate visitors. Moreover, tourism is a "green" industry that, unlike factories, generates a low level of pollution. In fact, because beautiful natural landscapes are often places that tourists come to see, a country will often be sure to maintain the landscape in order to keep it attractive for tourists. Despite the benefits, there are aspects of tourism that may prove harmful to a country. For instance, a country may suffer from the loss of their traditional culture. This is caused by people in a country changing their lifestyle, customs, and language in order to more effectively serve visitors or because they become influenced by foreign countries. This can cause stress in a traditional society and could even lead to animosity towards tourists. In addition, because tourists often carry expensive objects like cameras and are unaware of their surroundings, they make good targets for theft. Crime also increases as a result of the increases in drugs and prostitution that caters to some vacationers. In summary, global tourism is greatly beneficial to an economy and environment of a country. However, it can be detrimental in several ways. To my way of thinking, a country should seek to develop its tourism industry because it can bring steady jobs to many people without their need for higher education and without the risk of environmental damages.
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industry
implies an increasing need for a variety of services such as hotels, transport, restaurants, and entertainment. This results in a considerable number of jobs
being created
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people
who lack a college education and
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Despite the benefits, there are aspects of
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that may prove harmful to a
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For instance
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may suffer from the loss of their traditional culture. This
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people
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changing their lifestyle, customs, and language in order to more
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because
they become influenced by foreign
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. This can cause
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stress
in a traditional society and could even lead to animosity towards
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tourists
.
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In summary, global
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tourism
is
greatly
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.
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, it can be detrimental in several ways. To my way of thinking, a
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country
should seek to develop its
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tourism
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steady jobs to
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without their need for higher education and without the
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of environmental damages.
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IELTS essay Many country encourage tourism. Does it bring advantages or disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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