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Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing for society. v.4

Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing for society. v. 4
The use of adverts has become increasingly popular amongst many companies to boost their profits. This essay will outline the various factors which are needed to make an advertisement more effective, and also, discuss why this approach contains equally significant merits and demerits. At the outset, several causes could be considered to produce effective advertisements. Firstly, celebrity endorsement is one of the main reasons that can impact the sales of the company positively. It is because die-hard fans are more likely to purchase the products being endorsed by the favourite celebs. The significant increase in profit of MRF company could be an example of its, whose products are being promoted by renowned cricketer M. S. Dhoni. Secondly, another aspect can be the creativity of Ad- makers, because by choosing the perfect script and catchy jingles, and by giving the complete information in less time, and by making it more creative by inculcating innovative ideas, they can assist the companies to entice the new customer. After watching such ads, customers get swayed away by the promoted products and companies that huge profits as a result. Moving on, using adverts as a method to increase profits can be considered to have positive and negative outcomes. When it comes to the positive, owing to attractive advertisements, customers might become aware of the latest products and services. At the same time, smart shopping can be done after comparing the price range of similar products of different manufacturers. As a twofold result, both companies and communities are getting benefits. However, its negative effect could be on the children, who easily get swayed by the adverts, which are especially focused on them. As children do not have enough rational thinking. So, they cannot compare the effectiveness of products in term of needs, usage and price. Eventually, they could force their parents to shop unnecessary things. In conclusion, advertisements are used to increase the profits of numerous companies. Nonetheless, not all the consequences of this trend have been positive.
The
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use
of adverts has become
increasingly
popular amongst
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many
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companies
to boost their
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profits
. This essay will outline the various factors which
are needed
to
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make
an
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advertisement
more effective, and
also
, discuss why this approach contains
equally
significant merits and demerits.

At the outset, several causes could
be considered
to produce effective
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advertisements
.
Firstly
, celebrity endorsement is one of the main reasons that can impact the sales of the
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company
positively
. It is
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because
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die
-
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hard
fans are more likely to
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purchase
the
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products
being endorsed
by the
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favourite
celebs. The significant increase in
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profit
of MRF
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company
could be an example of its, whose
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products
are
being promoted
by renowned cricketer M. S.
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Dhoni
.
Secondly
, another aspect can be the creativity of Ad- makers,
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because
by choosing the perfect script and catchy jingles, and by giving the complete information in less time, and by making it more creative by inculcating innovative
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ideas
, they can assist the
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companies
to entice the new customer. After watching such ads, customers
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get
swayed away by the promoted
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products
and
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companies
that huge
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profits
as a result
.

Moving on, using adverts as a method to increase
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profits
can
be considered
to have
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positive
and
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negative
outcomes. When it
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comes
to the
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positive
, owing to attractive
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advertisements
, customers might become aware of the latest
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products
and services. At the same time, smart shopping can
be done
after comparing the price range of similar
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products
of
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different
manufacturers. As a twofold result, both
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companies
and communities are getting benefits.
However
, its
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negative
effect could be on the children, who
easily
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get
swayed by the adverts, which are
especially
focused on them.
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As
children do not have
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enough
rational thinking.
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So
, they cannot compare the effectiveness of
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products
in term of needs, usage and price.
Eventually
, they could force their parents to shop unnecessary things.

In conclusion
,
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advertisements
are
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used
to increase the
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profits
of numerous
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companies
. Nonetheless, not all the consequences of this trend have been
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positive
.
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IELTS essay Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing for society. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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