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Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing to the society? v.1

Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing to the society? v. 1
Advertising is one of the vital may of businesses to promote their products and services to customers to increase their market share. I aim to explore this amusement phenomenon from diverse perspectives, and I think that will bring both positive and negative effects to the society. To my maid, an arrange of factors contribute to make advertisements successful. Firstly, interesting and non-forgettable content is important. A good advertisement can catch people’s attention and make a deep impression on them, such as amusement storyline, wonderful jingles or music and a deeply rooted concept. The Intel is a typical example, it has ads that are always accompanied by a unique lovely melody. Most people of the world will know what the product is as soon as they hear the melody. In addition, the content of advertisements should meet the demands of consumers. Advertising is often the first channel for customers to get the information on the new products and services, therefore, only when they feel that is the item which they really need could arouse their desire to consume. Finally, effective publicity channels would make the ads affect more buyers. Businesses should design and provide a variety of advertisements to different channels, for instance, a big poster board at a bus stop and a footage on social media. Advertisements have both positive and negative impact on the society and it largely depends on the authenticity of the content. A good content could help customers to make a decision to get an ideal good, at a same time increase company’s sales and profits. However, a very thing has two sides, certain bad businesses sell unqualified goods to society through false advertising which is harmful to the interests of consumers. In conclusion, the key points of effectiveness of advertisements are the contents and published channels, which will impact people’s behaviour of spending well. Beside, citizens should be careful of the fake information which provide from advertisements.
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that will bring both
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positive
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negative
effects to the society.

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arrange
of factors contribute to
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make
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advertisements
successful.
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content
is
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important
. A
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good
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advertisement
can catch
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people
’s attention and
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make
a deep impression on them, such as amusement storyline, wonderful jingles or music and a
deeply
rooted concept. The Intel is a typical example, it has ads that are always accompanied by a unique lovely melody. Most
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people
of the world will know what the product is as
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soon
as they hear the melody.
In addition
, the
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content
of
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advertisements
should
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meet
the demands of consumers. Advertising is
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often
the
first
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channel
for customers to
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get
the information on the new products and services,
therefore
,
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only
when they feel
that is
the item which they
really
need could arouse their desire to consume.
Finally
, effective publicity
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channels
would
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make
the ads
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affect
more buyers. Businesses should design and provide a variety of
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advertisements
to
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different
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channels
,
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, a
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big
poster board at a bus
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stop
and a footage on social media.

Advertisements have both
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positive
and
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negative
impact on the society and it
largely
depends on the authenticity of the
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content
. A
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good
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content
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help
customers to
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make
a decision to
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an ideal
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good
, at a same time increase
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company
’s sales and profits.
However
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thing has two sides, certain
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bad
businesses sell unqualified
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goods
to society through false advertising which is harmful to the interests of consumers.

In conclusion
, the key points of effectiveness of
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advertisements
are the contents and published
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channels
, which will impact
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people
’s
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behaviour
of spending well. Beside, citizens should be careful of the fake information which provide from
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.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing to the society? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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