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Many people believe that the gap between rich and poor is widening nowadays, because in the current economic situation the rich become richer while the poor become poorer. What are the problems this situation may cause? What measures can be taken to solve v.2

Many people believe that the gap between rich and poor is widening nowadays, because in the current economic situation the rich become richer while the poor become poorer. What are the problems this situation may cause? What measures can be taken to solve v. 2
In this era of selfishness, people are busy in making money. In efforts of making more and more money, some touches the peak while some are left behind as poor due to lack of opportunities or some other reasons. The central question remain that what problems a wider gap between poor and richer may bring to a nation. This essay will examine the the problems triggered by the gap between poor and richer with possible solutions Multifarious points can be given to shore up my views. To start with, A country' s building infrastructure depends how balanced people are in term of finance. In case of greater gap between poor and richer either there will be big houses or lots of small slums which is not ideal as far as a good infrastructure of a nation is concerned. To be specific, There is a mammoth gap between richer and poor in india which has spelled them being counted among the under develop country further emphasizing on my point of views, large gap between poor and richer hurts the economy of a particular nation which further may spell economy plunge to a nation. Adding to it, it is next to impossible for poor people to provide higher education to their children as education has gone out of the reach of poor as far money is concern, it will spell more uneducated people on roads fighting their fate. their are numerous remedies that can be applied to cure this problem. First and foremost, government should come into action and equal opportunities ought to be provided to poor and richer so they both may have equal option to progress. Those who are poor, shell be provided financial help to support their family To recapitulate, condition of inhabitants portray the condition of a particular nation at international market. Hence. government shell work out of their skin to stable their people financial condition
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are busy in making money. In efforts of making more and more money,
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some
touches the peak while
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some
are
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left
behind as
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poor
due to lack of opportunities or
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some
other reasons. The central question remain that what problems a wider
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gap
between
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poor
and
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richer
may bring to a
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nation
. This essay will examine
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the the
problems triggered by the
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gap
between
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poor
and
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richer
with possible
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solutions


Multifarious points can be
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given
to shore up my views. To
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start
with, A
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depends
how balanced
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people
are in term of finance. In case of greater
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gap
between
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poor
and
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richer
either there will be
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big
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houses
or lots of
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small
slums which is not ideal as far as a
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good
infrastructure of a
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nation
is concerned
. To be specific, There is a mammoth
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gap
between
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richer
and
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poor
in
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india
which has spelled them
being counted
among the under develop
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country


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further
emphasizing on my point of views, large
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gap
between
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poor
and
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richer
hurts the economy of a particular
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nation
which
further
may spell economy plunge to a
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nation
. Adding to it, it is
next
to impossible for
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poor
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people
to provide higher education to their children as education has gone out of the reach of
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poor
as far money is concern, it will spell more uneducated
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people
on roads fighting their fate.

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their
are numerous remedies that can
be applied
to cure this problem.
First
and foremost,
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government
should
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come
into action and equal opportunities ought to
be provided
to
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poor
and
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richer
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so
they both may have equal option to progress. Those who are
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poor
,
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shell
be provided
financial
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help
to support their
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family


To recapitulate, condition of inhabitants portray the condition of a particular
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nation
at international market.
Hence
.
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government
shell work out of their skin to stable their
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people
financial
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condition
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that the gap between rich and poor is widening nowadays, because in the current economic situation the rich become richer while the poor become poorer. What are the problems this situation may cause? What measures can be taken to solve v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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