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Many cannot speak or present well in public some people think that this is important to speak well in public, so the training should be from school. You agree or disagree. v.2

Many cannot speak or present well in public some people think that this is important to speak well in public, so the training should be from school. You agree or disagree. v. 2
In today' s era, to express something it is must that a person should have confidence to speak in public so, it has been seen that many people hesitate to present themselves in huge crowd whereas, it is elixir to speak proficiently in public so, for this school should train children for better future. In this essay, I will agree on the above statement and discuss on the same. Nowadays, whether one is working in corporate or a sole proprietor, everyone has to deal with number of people. Sometimes, to convey their message they arrange meetings or conferences where public speaking skills are must but, many people still hesitate to speak among the audience and hire other people to present on behalf of them hence, it is must that public speaking should be a part of schooling where children can learn plethora of ways to overcome the fear moreover, school is the only place where mistakes can be done and mentors help them to improve themselves. Public speaking cannot be learned in one go, it is a continuous learning process. On the other hand, schools are the best place to learn new things. Firstly, there is no one to compete and tease them whereas in real world where competition is at peak, people find reason to deteriorate the performance of another people by realizing their weaknesses. Secondly, if a person has overcomed this phobia in school then in their job career they will be succeeded because, they know how to present themselves in public and influence them whereas, people who are confident have my rates of opportunities in career. Lastly, not everyone get chance to learn these things in school but there are some other ways to learn these skills. By concluding this, no doubt, public speaking is must but in this tough competition it is crucial that schools should prepare children to face every hurdle.
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that a person should have confidence to speak in
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, it has been
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seen
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many
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people
hesitate to present themselves in huge crowd whereas, it is elixir to speak
proficiently
in
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public
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so
, for this
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school
should train children for better future. In this essay, I will
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agree
on the above statement and discuss on the same.

Nowadays, whether one is working in corporate or a sole proprietor, everyone
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has to
deal with number of
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people
.
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Sometimes
, to convey their message they arrange meetings or conferences where
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public
speaking
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skills
are
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must
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but
,
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many
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people
still
hesitate to speak among the audience and hire other
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people
to present on behalf of them
hence
, it is
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must
that
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public
speaking should be a part of schooling where children can
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learn
plethora of ways to overcome the fear
moreover
,
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school
is the
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only
place where mistakes can
be done
and mentors
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help
them to
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improve
themselves.
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Public
speaking cannot
be learned
in one go, it is a continuous learning process.

On the other hand
,
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schools
are the best place to
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learn
new things.
Firstly
, there is no one to compete and tease them whereas in real world where competition is at peak,
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people
find reason to deteriorate the performance of another
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people
by realizing their weaknesses.
Secondly
, if a person has
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overcomed
this phobia in
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school
then in their job career they will
be succeeded
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because
, they know how to present themselves in
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public
and influence them whereas,
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people
who are confident have my rates of opportunities in career.
Lastly
, not everyone
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get
chance to
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learn
these things in
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school
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but
there are
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some
other ways to
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learn
these
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skills
.

By concluding this, no doubt,
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public
speaking is
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must
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but
in this tough competition it is crucial that
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schools
should prepare children to face every hurdle.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many cannot speak or present well in public some people think that this is important to speak well in public, so the training should be from school. You agree or disagree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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