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Many people cannot speak or present well in public, an idea is to start the training from school. State if it is important to speak well in public. v.1

Many people cannot speak or present well in public, an idea is to start the training from school. State if it is important to speak well in public. v. 1
In the modern world, many people are not good at public speech. In this reason, some people are willing to start the training courses of public performance as soon as possible. The idea of starting these courses from the university is well-welcomed by many people, especially the students are willing to take such kinds of lessons, as in many cases, their future career depends on the skill of public presentation. Personally, I believe that it is a good idea to teach the children from the school at this skill. On the one hand, it is true that starting such kinds of courses from the school may be beneficial for the pupils, as they can learn how to behave themselves in front of the society, to build communication with them and collaborate with other individuals. Furthermore, this skill gives a perfect opportunity for the pupils, if they are willing to continue their study, as many universities require be good at speaking. To illustrate, many humanitarian faculties select the students based on this requirement. On the other hand, many people believe that this ability is not necessary for many pupils, especially technical science not related to speaking. They believe that concentrating on the developing professional skills is essential. Moreover, hot having this ability is not fatal for the many students, as they can find a job in other fields. For example, science and researching are not related to this capability, accordingly, individuals are able to succeed in the area. In conclusion, although many people believe that teaching the children to speak well in public is crucial, others feel that the people who cannot express their opinions clearly, can succeed in other areas. Personally, I believe that it is a viable option to start the courses from the secondary school.
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performance as
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as possible. The
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idea
of starting these
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courses
from the university is well-welcomed by
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people
,
especially
the students are willing to take such kinds of lessons, as in
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many
cases, their future career depends on the
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skill
of
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public
presentation.
Personally
, I
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believe
that it is a
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good
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idea
to teach the children from the school at this
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skill
.

On the one hand, it is true that starting such kinds of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
from the school may be beneficial for the pupils, as they can learn how to behave themselves in front of the society, to build communication with them and collaborate with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
individuals.
Furthermore
, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
gives a perfect opportunity for the pupils, if they are willing to continue their study, as
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many
universities require be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at speaking. To illustrate,
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many
humanitarian faculties select the students based on this requirement.

On the
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other
hand,
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many
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people
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believe
that this ability is not necessary for
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many
pupils,
especially
technical science not related to speaking. They
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that concentrating on the developing professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
is essential.
Moreover
, hot having this ability is not fatal for the
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many
students, as they can find a job in
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other
fields.
For example
, science and researching are not related to this capability,
accordingly
, individuals are able to succeed in the area.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
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believe
that teaching the children to speak well in
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public
is crucial, others feel that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who cannot express their opinions
clearly
, can succeed in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
areas.
Personally
, I
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believe
that it is a viable option to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
the
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courses
from the secondary school.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people cannot speak or present well in public, an idea is to start the training from school. State if it is important to speak well in public. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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