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Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. v. 3
Nowadays it is strongly believed that everyone should have equal salary without any much difference. In my view, to create an equilibrium and a happier culture there should be less differences in a wage of every person because many problems such as crime, unfairness, and health arise with unequal incomes. Even though having good skills, many people spend their daily life miserable because they are not credited equal amount which is being given to other non-qualified persons. This mismanagement creates a lot of problems in our culture. For example, those people, who are awarded less, try to earn more money by other means that may be good or bad. Hence; therefore, people shall always be given an equal amount of money in order to create fair system. Additionally, wage difference creates an unbalanced society, that many people spend their wealthy life, however, other remain at boarder line due to insufficient resources. Since many people who work less, and live comfortable creates a psychological effect over those who work more and live uncomfortably. For example, in Pakistan, some of the jobs are offered with less work and higher salaries which are often provided to wealthy people. Hence; therefore, salary should be equal to promote a balanced society. In conclusion, I would say that there should be an equal wage of every person as with difference a lot of problems arise, such as less salary pushes people to earn money by using evil tricks and also creates an unbalanced society that keep them under pressure all time.
Nowadays it is
strongly
believed that everyone should have
equal
salary
without any much
difference
. In my view, to
create
an equilibrium and a happier culture there should be
less
differences
in a wage of every person
because
many
problems such as crime, unfairness, and health arise with unequal incomes.

Even though
having
good
skills
,
many
people
spend their daily life miserable
because
they are not credited
equal
amount which is being
given
to other non-qualified persons. This mismanagement
creates
a lot of
problems in our culture.
For example
, those
people
, who
are awarded
less
, try to earn more money by other means that may be
good
or
bad
.
Hence
;
therefore
,
people
shall always be
given
an
equal
amount of money in order to
create
fair
system.

Additionally
, wage
difference
creates
an unbalanced society, that
many
people
spend their wealthy life,
however
, other remain at boarder line due to insufficient resources. Since
many
people
who work
less
, and
live
comfortable
creates
a psychological effect over those who work more and
live
uncomfortably
.
For example
, in Pakistan,
some of the
jobs
are offered
with
less
work and higher
salaries
which are
often
provided to wealthy
people
.
Hence
;
therefore
,
salary
should be
equal
to promote a balanced society.

In conclusion
, I would say that there should be an
equal
wage of every person as with
difference
a lot of
problems arise, such as
less
salary
pushes
people
to earn money by using evil tricks and
also
creates
an unbalanced society that
keep
them under pressure all time.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
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