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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the Internet is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the Internet is now replacing their functions. v. 2
Digital technology has without question changed the way we read access books and this threatens the role of the public library. My view is that while there is a good argument for saying libraries are much less relevant these days, they will always have a place in society, despite the many benefits of the Internet. The advance of online reading technologies and services is one compelling argument in favour of limiting any funding libraries. It is now possible to not just buy any book you want online through stores such as Amazon, you are also able to borrow books for a small subscription fee from various sites. Indeed, these online services are generally much more comprehensive and reliable than any provided by a local library where you can often have to wait for weeks for the book you want. In these circumstances, it is quite possible to argue that public libraries are out of date and have been largely overtaken by technology. Despite this, public libraries do still have some role to play and it would be a mistake to abolish them entirely. one such role is lending books to children and encourage them to acquire the reading habits for books by having schemes that reward them for borrowing books on a regular basis. Many parents who are anxious about the amount of screen time their children would much prefer to visit a library where they can more closely monitor the books their children are taking out. Another important role public libraries perform is stocking a wide range of reference books and more specialised books that are typically not available via online services. While these services may be limited, they still matter and show that libraries still perform an important function. My conclusion is a mixed one. On the one hand, I believe it is true that nearly all the function of libraries have been replaced by digital technology, but in some areas, namely children' s books and reference books, public libraries do have a role to play.
Digital technology has without question
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changed
the way we read access
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books
and this threatens the
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role
of the
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public
library. My view is that while there is a
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good
argument for saying libraries are much less relevant these days, they will always have a place in society, despite the
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many
benefits of the Internet.

The advance of
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online
reading technologies and
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services
is one compelling argument in
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favour
of limiting any funding libraries. It is
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now
possible to not
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just
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buy
any
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book
you want
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online
through stores such as Amazon, you are
also
able to borrow
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books
for a
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small
subscription fee from various sites.
Indeed
, these
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online
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services
are
generally
much more comprehensive and reliable than any provided by a local library where you can
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often
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have to
wait for weeks for the
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book
you want. In these circumstances, it is quite possible to argue that
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public
libraries are out of date and have been
largely
overtaken by technology.

Despite this,
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public
libraries do
still
have
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some
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role
to play and it would be a mistake to abolish them
entirely
.
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one
such
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role
is lending
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books
to
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children
and encourage them to acquire the reading habits for
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books
by having schemes that reward them for borrowing
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books
on a regular basis.
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Many
parents who are anxious about the amount of screen time their
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children
would much prefer to visit a library where they can more
closely
monitor the
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books
their
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children
are taking out. Another
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important
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role
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public
libraries perform is stocking a wide range of reference
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books
and more
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specialised
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books
that are
typically
not available via
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online
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services
. While these
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services
may
be limited
, they
still
matter and
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show
that libraries
still
perform an
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important
function.

My conclusion is a mixed one. On the one hand, I believe it is true that
nearly
all the function of libraries have
been replaced
by digital technology,
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but
in
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some
areas,
namely
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books
and reference
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,
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public
libraries do have a
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role
to play.
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34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the Internet is now replacing their functions. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
5.5
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