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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.6

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 6
In developing nations, transnational corporations are growing rapidly. Although, it is a good positive sign for companies in terms of cheap labour cost. However, there are some drawbacks of forcing workers to task for long working hours. The primary benefit of setting up companies in developing countries is low cost incurred in manufacturing products. This is because, companies hire labours at a very low wages to produce product compared to their home country, due high salaries. Wages of western people's salaries are almost double than in the developing nations. For example, Apple companies most of their products manufactured in China and these products assembled in Japan, that is why costly iPhones starting price are $499. However, there is a drawback of increasing number multinational companies, these companies apply their own strict rules of working hours for their own benefit to get results, sometimes people have to work for around 14 hours a day in these companies to meet deadlines. This creates huge pressure on people to work harder beyond their limits, which is also affecting their health mentally. One such example is, a report stated by New York times in 2011, In China many Chinese labours was committing suicide because of immense pressure to perform task long hours from Apple corporation. In conclusion, the prime benefit for multinational companies prefer their products to be manufactured in developing is due to low cost labours, but the biggest drawback is, they are also exploiting people to do jobs more numbers of hours.
In
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developing
nations, transnational corporations are growing
rapidly
. Although, it is a
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good
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positive
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sign
for
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companies
in terms of
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cheap
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labour
cost.
However
, there are
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some
drawbacks of forcing workers to task for long working hours.

The primary benefit of setting up
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companies
in
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developing
countries is low cost incurred in manufacturing
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products
. This is
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because
,
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companies
hire
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labours
at a
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very
low wages to produce
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product
compared to their home country, due high salaries. Wages of western
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people
's salaries are almost
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double
than in the
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developing
nations.
For example
, Apple
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companies
most of their
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products
manufactured in China and these
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products
assembled in Japan,
that is
why costly iPhones starting price are $499.

However
, there is a drawback of increasing number multinational
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companies
, these
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companies
apply their
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own
strict
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rules
of working
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hours
for their
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own
benefit to
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get
results,
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sometimes
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people
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have to
work for around 14
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hours
a day in these
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companies
to
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meet
deadlines. This creates huge pressure on
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people
to work harder beyond their limits, which is
also
affecting their health mentally. One such example is, a report stated by
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New York times
in 2011, In China
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many
Chinese
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labours
was committing suicide
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because
of immense pressure to perform task long
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hours
from Apple corporation.

In conclusion
, the prime benefit for multinational
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companies
prefer their
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products
to
be manufactured
in
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developing
is due to low cost
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labours
,
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but
the biggest drawback is, they are
also
exploiting
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people
to do jobs more numbers of
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hours
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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