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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.53

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. v. 53
It is often argued that several social issues is caused by spending life in the other country and speaking another language. I strongly agree with this point of view, as I believe that speaking a foreign dialect makes people hard to communicate with national residents, while some people think this is not a problem, just using time to adjust themselves. Firstly, residing in abroad which you need to use their home language causes several problems, especially the communicating issue. This because of talking in a dialect which have different words and meaning will make them hard to speak. For example, I was an exchange student before. During the first day of school, I could not communicate with Americans people, because of a language trouble. While it is true that using time to adjust is a key, after 3 months, I could speak with people easily. Moreover, the different culture and lifestyle can also cause a problem. Every country have traditional foods and lifestyles, due to the fact that people, lack of knowledge of a national country. For instance, when I was in United state, I was a Buddhism, but I had to go to church every Sunday. This kind of situation will make them feel lonely and isolated. However, someone thinks just do as what the foreign do and being a part of the activity will relieve this trouble. In conclusion, residing in other nation is a cause of communicating and practical problem. It is hard to live and speak with people in the unused place. In my opinion, it is not that easy to adjust themselves or make them feel familiar in another place, which is not really their hometown.
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argued that several social issues
is caused
by spending life in the other country and speaking another language. I
strongly
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agree
with this point of view, as I believe that speaking a foreign dialect
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makes
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people
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hard
to communicate with national residents, while
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some
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people
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think
this is not a
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problem
,
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just
using time to adjust themselves.

Firstly
, residing in abroad which you need to
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use
their home language causes several
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problems
,
especially
the communicating issue. This
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because
of talking in a dialect which have
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different
words and meaning will
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make
them
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hard
to speak.
For example
, I was an exchange student
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before
. During the
first
day of school, I could not communicate with Americans
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people
,
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because
of a language trouble. While it is true that using time to adjust is a key, after 3 months, I could speak with
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people
easily
.

Moreover
, the
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different
culture and lifestyle can
also
cause a
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problem
. Every country have traditional foods and lifestyles, due to the fact that
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people
, lack of knowledge of a national country.
For instance
, when I was in United state, I was a Buddhism,
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but
I had to go to church every Sunday. This kind of situation will
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make
them feel lonely and isolated.
However
, someone
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thinks
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just
do as what the foreign do and being a part of the activity will relieve this trouble.

In conclusion
, residing in other nation is a cause of communicating and practical
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problem
. It is
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hard
to
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live
and speak with
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people
in the unused place. In my opinion, it is not that easy to adjust themselves or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
them feel familiar in another place, which is not
really
their hometown.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. v. 53

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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