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Life now is better than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Life now is better than 100 years ago. with this statement? v. 1
Some people argue that life in the past was tougher than the current era, some think nowadays viability is worse than years ago for some reasons. I personally agree that today is easier to exist than the ancient times. Firstly, it is generally accepted that alive in the 21st century is a delight for everyone, due to it is easy to go anywhere by various transportations such as motorcycle, car, ship, airplane, etc. Following this further, distance is no longer a problem for people. For example, on the same date, I could go to two different countries with airplane, it only needs hours to reach thousand kilometre gap by airplane. As a result, travelling abroad becomes a trend, especially for 20s people. Besides transportation, people nowadays tend to cut off the space with telecommunication technology such as mobile phones and the internet. Furthermore, people could communicate with others from around the world by talking through phones or texting on internet with media social. On the other hand, 100 years ago, transportation and communication technology had not existed yet, back then, people only walk or ride the horse to severe places, also most of the ancient carved the stones for addressing the others. In addition, food has changed from time to time. It is common to find the fried chicken in most restaurants over the world, also many people love it. Nevertheless, a hundred years ago the ancient human did not eat fried chicken hence they did not know about flour and other spices to make fried chicken. They tend to eat raw meat or vegetables without spices. It is difficult to imagine to eat those foods these days. Thus, raw foods contain many bacteria that cause many diseases. Taking everything into consideration, it is my opinion that life in this current world is more uncomplicated for cutting gap and hour, also more concern about food, compared with the past period.
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that alive in the 21st century is a delight for everyone, due to it is easy to go anywhere by various transportations such as motorcycle, car, ship, airplane, etc. Following this
further
, distance is no longer a problem for
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people
.
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, on the same date, I could go to two
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different
countries with airplane, it
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needs hours to reach
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kilometre
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by airplane.
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, travelling abroad becomes a trend,
especially
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people
.
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transportation,
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nowadays tend to
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off the space with telecommunication technology such as mobile phones and the internet.
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could communicate with others from around the world by talking through phones or texting on internet with media social.
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yet
, back then,
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people
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walk or ride the horse to severe places,
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most of the ancient carved the stones for addressing the others.

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has
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from time to time. It is common to find the fried chicken in most restaurants over the world,
also
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people
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love
it.
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, a hundred years ago the ancient human did not eat fried chicken
hence
they did not know about flour and other spices to
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fried chicken. They tend to eat raw meat or vegetables without spices. It is difficult to
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imagine to eat
those
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these days.
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, raw
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contain
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bacteria that cause
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diseases.

Taking everything into consideration, it is my opinion that life in this
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current
world is more uncomplicated for cutting gap and hour,
also
more concern about
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food
, compared with the past period.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Life now is better than 100 years ago. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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