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Letter to the Student Body Our meal plans offer breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Many of us don’t have time to eat breakfast and the dinning rooms are always empty in the morning as a result. This is a clear waste of money for students. The administration v.2

Letter to the Student Body Our meal plans offer breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Many of us don’t have time to eat breakfast and the dinning rooms are always empty in the morning as a result. This is a clear waste of money for students. The administration v. 2
Over the past few decades, the trend to travel places with extreme weather has become extremely popular. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of visiting such places. To begin with the advantages, people with an adventurous nature believes in discovering places, where they have never been before. Also that their excitement and thrill helps them to face all the odds with great confidence. To cite an example, a young man stayed in Antarctica for six months, which gave him real pleasure. Another benefit is that one can familiarize themselves with the customs and traditions followed in other places. For instance, anyone can learn about the food cooked in a desert. These are the positive aspects of travelling to unknown areas. Apart from these merits, there are some drawbacks which cannot be ignored. One of the most lethal disadvantage is that such type of excursions is extremely fatal. There are recorded instances where people have lost their lives while trekking, and later their dead bodies were found. Another demerit is that visiting such unpopular places like Sahara desert or Antarctica is not budget-friendly. For instance, sightseeing at either of the mentioned places is not convenient, one has to take a host of flights to reach the destination. To sum up, these are the disadvantages of travelling to unfamiliar places. To conclude, this essay has outlined the merits and the demerits of travelling to places, where the survival is tough. Although such experiences give one an invaluable experience, they can also be life-threatening.
Over the past few decades, the trend to travel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
with extreme weather has become
extremely
popular. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of visiting such places.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with the advantages,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with an adventurous nature believes in discovering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
, where they have never been
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before
.
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Also
that their excitement and thrill
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to face all the odds with great confidence. To cite an example, a young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
stayed in Antarctica for six months, which gave him real pleasure. Another benefit is that one can familiarize themselves with the customs and traditions followed in other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
.
For instance
, anyone can learn about the food cooked in a desert. These are the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspects of travelling to unknown areas.

Apart from these merits, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
drawbacks which cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
. One of the most lethal
Please check whether a plural form of 'disadvantage' should be used.
disadvantage
is that such type of excursions is
extremely
fatal. There
are recorded
instances where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have lost their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
while trekking, and later their dead bodies
were found
. Another demerit is that visiting such unpopular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
A determiner is probably missing here: "like the Sahara desert".
like Sahara desert
or Antarctica is not budget-friendly.
For instance
, sightseeing at either of the mentioned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
is not convenient, one
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
take a host of flights to reach the destination. To sum up, these are the disadvantages of travelling to unfamiliar places.

To conclude
, this essay has outlined the merits and the demerits of travelling to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
, where the survival is tough. Although such experiences give one an invaluable experience, they can
also
be life-threatening.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Letter to the Student Body Our meal plans offer breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Many of us don’t have time to eat breakfast and the dinning rooms are always empty in the morning as a result. This is a clear waste of money for students. The administration v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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