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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.11

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 11
There is no doubt that the modern lifestyle has brought several changes in our life, whether positive or negative. It is considered by some that there is a detrimental effect on families due to the fast pace and burdens of modern life. I strongly agree with this notion and I will elaborate on the reasons below. The main reason why I believe present life has a damaging effect on families is that nowadays, people have more demands and wishes other than needs which require more money to be earned so that they could be fulfilled. For example, these days, people search for money making opportunities and prefer working for long hours or doing more than one jobs to make more money. Such hectic engagement to work make them stressed out and extremely tired. As a result, they could not spend proper quality time with their family therefore, the family life is affected in a negative manner due to their hectic schedule. Another reason for such adverse effect is the extreme sense of competition among youngsters. In order to be successful in this competitive world, the students try to study for late hours to complete their assignments and projects. For instance, according to a survey conducted by a student of Social Science, a number of students these days, are not been able to get themselves engaged in family gatherings and not even managed to have a meal together with their family members on daily basis due to the burden of homework and projects. Such a busy life to have a successful career in the future often weakens their family bonding, thus produces a harmful effect on their relationships. In conclusion, I reiterate my vehement belief that the fast moving modern life at the present time and the anxiety associated with it does have adverse ramifications on families due to the pressure on oneself of making more money and to achieve a successful career. Although modern life demands many things, people should not forget that love and affection with family is beyond everything.
There is no doubt that the
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modern
lifestyle has brought several
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changes
in our
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life
, whether
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positive
or
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negative
. It
is considered
by
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some
that there is a detrimental
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effect
on
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families
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due
to the
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fast
pace and burdens of
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modern
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life
. I
strongly
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agree
with this notion and I will elaborate on the reasons below.

The main reason why I believe present
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life
has a damaging
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effect
on
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families
is that nowadays,
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people
have more demands and wishes other than needs which require more
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money
to
be earned
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so
that they could
be fulfilled
.
For example
, these days,
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people
search for
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money
making opportunities and prefer working for long hours or doing more than one jobs to
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make
more
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money
. Such hectic engagement to work
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make
them
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stressed
out and
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extremely tired
.
As a result
, they could not spend proper quality time with their
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family
therefore
, the
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family
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life
is
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affected
in a
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negative
manner
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due
to their hectic schedule.

Another reason for such adverse
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effect
is the extreme sense of competition among youngsters. In order to be successful in this competitive world, the students try to study for late hours to complete their assignments and projects.
For instance
, according to a survey conducted by a student of Social Science, a number of students these days, are not been able to
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get
themselves engaged in
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family
gatherings and not even managed to have a meal together with their
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family
members on daily basis
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due
to the burden of homework and projects. Such a busy
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life
to have a successful career in the future
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often
weakens their
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family
bonding,
thus
produces a harmful
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effect
on their relationships.

In conclusion
, I reiterate my vehement belief that the
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fast
moving
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modern
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life
at the present time and the anxiety associated with it does have adverse ramifications on
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families
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due
to the pressure on oneself of making more
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money
and to achieve a successful career. Although
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modern
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life
demands
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many
things,
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people
should not forget that
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love
and affection with
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family
is beyond everything.
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IELTS essay Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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