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Do you think your weekends are long enough actually i have got two days for weekends and its sufficient for me because in my country quite a few people have only one weekend so two days are enough for me to spend time with family and finish my personal an v.1

Do you think your weekends are long enough actually i have got two days for weekends and its sufficient for me because in my country quite a few people have only one weekend so two days are enough for me to spend time with family and finish my personal an v. 1
People are increasingly suffering from sickness as a result of stress. This essay will discuss the main causes of It, which are job pressure and lack of physical activities. It will also suggest some solutions, which are choosing less demanding jobs and including some physical or recreational activities in daily life. Nowadays the jobs have become very stressful and hectic because of the competitiveness in the market. There are always tight deadlines and long job hours moreover, because of such demanding work assignments people are left with no time to engage in any form of physical activity. For example, a person working for 8 to 10 hours a day feels so exhausted after work that would crash into bed or retire back home rather than going to jog, yoga session or any social engagement. Such long work hours and no unwinding activity will eventually lead to stress. To reduce the stress which can cause mental and physical health issues we need to modify our living style and adopt a more work life balance approach that includes some physical and relaxing activities. For example, people should switch to jobs which are less demanding and give flexibility in working hours. Making more money and leading a life with diseases is worse than opting for less ambitious jobs and spending some time for pleasure and relaxation. To conclude, I would say stress is becoming very common in our society. This essay has discussed that it is the result of job pressures and lack of recreational activities and essay suggested that these problems can be solved by leading a balanced life moreover, opting for less stressed jobs and including some physical activities in our daily routine.
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increasingly
suffering from sickness
as a result
of
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stress
. This essay will discuss the main causes of It, which are
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job
pressure and lack of
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physical
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activities
. It will
also
suggest
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some
solutions, which are choosing
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less
demanding
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jobs
and including
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some
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physical
or recreational
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activities
in daily life.

Nowadays the
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jobs
have become
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very
stressful and hectic
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because
of the competitiveness in the market. There are always tight deadlines and long
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job
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hours
moreover
,
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because
of such demanding
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work
assignments
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people
are
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left
with no time to engage in any form of
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physical
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activity
.
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, a person working for 8 to 10
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hours
a day feels
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so
exhausted after
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work
that would crash into bed or retire back home
rather
than going to jog, yoga session or any social engagement. Such long
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work
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hours
and no unwinding
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activity
will
eventually
lead to
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stress
.

To
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reduce
the
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stress
which can cause mental and
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health issues we need to modify our living style and adopt a more
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work life
balance approach that includes
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some
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physical
and relaxing
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activities
.
For example
,
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people
should switch to
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jobs
which are
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less
demanding and give flexibility in working
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hours
. Making more money and leading a life with diseases is worse than opting for
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less
ambitious
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jobs
and spending
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some
time for pleasure and relaxation.

To conclude
, I would say
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stress
is becoming
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very
common in our society. This essay has discussed that it is the result of
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job
pressures and lack of recreational
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activities
and essay suggested that these problems can
be solved
by leading a balanced life
moreover
, opting for
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less
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stressed
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jobs
and including
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some
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physical
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activities
in our daily routine.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Do you think your weekends are long enough actually i have got two days for weekends and its sufficient for me because in my country quite a few people have only one weekend so two days are enough for me to spend time with family and finish my personal an v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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