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Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of foreign language should be compulsory at all primary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of foreign language should be compulsory at all primary school. v. 1
Many people are arguing about studying a different talk. According to some people, it should be optional in schools, but others believe that teachers should teach a foreign tongue to children in schools. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of learning a different conversation as their primary subjects. On the one hand, it is a chance to become a bilingual that is an additional skill, which is good for getting a better job in the future. In a globalized world, having an occupation is not easier than the past, therefore many entrepreneurs are looking for intelligent people who have a lot of certificates and additional skills. As a result, learning foreign words can be a great tool to be qualified when they get jobs. To add more that, they can understand about different cultures. They can develop the ability of comprehend aspect of other people’s lifestyle and respect them. Consequently, they may make friends who live apart from them. It is an excellent method to communicate with different friends and improve their social skills. On the other hand, the number of people who teach a foreign conversation by private tutoring can decrease. The amount of online education or private tutors to teach different words cannot have stable income. Additionally, it can lead to the process of economic can decrease. To sum up, there are some drawbacks of studying a foreign word. However, it is a good way to become their children more intelligent and it will be helpful for getting their stable jobs in the future.
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conversation as their primary subjects.

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many
entrepreneurs are looking for intelligent
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people
who have
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a lot of
certificates and additional
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skills
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As a result
, learning
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foreign
words can be a great tool to
be qualified
when they
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get
jobs. To
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more that, they can understand about
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different
cultures. They can develop the ability of comprehend aspect of other
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people’s
lifestyle and respect them.
Consequently
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make
friends who
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live
apart from them. It is an excellent method to communicate with
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different
friends and
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improve
their social
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skills
.
On the other hand
, the number of
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people
who teach a
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foreign
conversation by private tutoring can decrease. The amount of online education or private tutors to teach
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different
words cannot have stable income.
Additionally
, it can lead to the process of economic can decrease.

To sum up, there are
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some
drawbacks of studying a
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foreign
word.
However
, it is a
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good
way to become their children more intelligent and it will be helpful for getting their stable jobs in the future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Speak a new language so that the world will be a new world.
Rumi

IELTS essay Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of foreign language should be compulsory at all primary school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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