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Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times and place of the offence. v.1

Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times and place of the offence. v. 1
The law is a system of rules and guidelines and it shapes political, social and economic relationships of people. Some people say that laws should be flexible because of different reasons and it should be amendable in different situations. However, this essay would discuss that laws should never be bounded by situations because flexibility would only make the system vulnerable and increase the crime rate. First and foremost, flexibility in rules and regulations make it weak. People personalised ordinance for their needs. The laws mould and use it makes difficult to judge and provide justice people who really deserve it. Moreover, flexibility in laws leads people to find loopholes. Thus, offenders can escape from punishment by finding excuses and moulding laws for their rights. Secondly, the crime rate has decreased due to fear of punishment. The bendable laws give more safety from the penalty of the crime. In addition, people think that crimes resolve their problems and flexible law safeguard them from the punishment. Therefore, more people do crimes because of lack of fear of punishment. Furthermore, flexible laws make confusion in people about what is wrong and right, people may part in crime due to unaware of flexible laws. Ironically, some people may part in crime unintentionally; flexible laws help people to get a solution from it. In some cases, people may do crimes but it was good for society, like this situation bendable law help them from punishment. To conclude, laws are essential for the better life of people. Flexibility in law deteriorates the overall performance of system and justice based on circumstances less productive. Notwithstanding, the update in law is needed as time changes.
The
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law
is a system of
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rules
and guidelines and it shapes political, social and economic relationships of
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people
.
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Some
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people
say that
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laws
should be
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flexible
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because
of
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different
reasons and it should be amendable in
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different
situations.
However
, this essay would discuss that
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laws
should never
be bounded
by situations
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because
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flexibility
would
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only
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make
the system vulnerable and increase the
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crime
rate.

First
and foremost,
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flexibility
in
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rules
and regulations
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make
it weak.
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People
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personalised
ordinance for their needs. The
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laws
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mould
and
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use
it
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makes
difficult to judge and provide justice
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people
who
really
deserve it.
Moreover
,
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flexibility
in
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laws
leads
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people
to find loopholes.
Thus
, offenders can escape from
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punishment
by finding excuses and
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moulding
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laws
for their rights.

Secondly
, the
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crime
rate has decreased due to fear of
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punishment
. The bendable
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laws
give more safety from the penalty of the
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crime
.
In addition
,
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people
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think
that
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crimes
resolve their problems and
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flexible
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law
safeguard them from the
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punishment
.
Therefore
, more
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people
do
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crimes
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because
of lack of fear of
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punishment
.
Furthermore
,
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flexible
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laws
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make
confusion in
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people
about what is
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wrong
and right,
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people
may part in
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crime
due to unaware of
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flexible
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laws
.
Ironically
,
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some
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people
may part in
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crime
unintentionally
;
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flexible
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laws
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help
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people
to
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get
a solution from it. In
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some
cases,
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people
may do
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crimes
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but
it was
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good
for society, like this situation bendable
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law
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help
them from punishment.

To conclude
,
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laws
are essential for the better life of
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people
.
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Flexibility
in
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law
deteriorates the
overall
performance of system and justice based on circumstances less productive. Notwithstanding, the update in
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law
is needed
as time
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changes
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times and place of the offence. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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