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Last Tuesday you flew from New York to Paris. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your cabin bag on the plane. Write a letter to the airline: -Where and when you lost your bag-What your bag looks like-What it is contents were v.1

Last Tuesday you flew from New York to Paris. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your cabin bag on the plane. Write a letter to the airline: -Where and when you lost your bag-What your bag looks like-What it is contents were v. 1
It is argued that the annual extinction of many languages is not a problem because having just a few languages leads to a more convenient life. It is disagreed that the convenience of using just a few key languages makes the dying out of less spoken dialects acceptable. This essay will first discuss the importance of jargon to culture and secondly the fact that learning a few common languages is unrealistic, followed by a reasoned conclusion. A language is not just a group of spoken words, but the key to someone’s culture. Dialect has evolved over thousands of years to reflect what it means to be from a particular place. For example, the Irish language has one of the widest vocabularies in the world and reflects their tradition of storytelling. Despite this, English has become the first language of the Irish, as many feel it makes it easier to communicate with the world. By speaking just a couple of languages, such as English and Chinese, you alienate billions of people throughout the world. English may be common, but it is not the ‘lingua Franca’ many people think it is and it would take generations for everyone to learn it. Countries like Korea and Vietnam have been trying to adopt English as a second accent for a long time, but most of their people still can’t fully grasp it. However, English has been the dialect of business for a long time and it should be encouraged to help a country become more economically competitive. To conclude, commonly spoken languages may make life more straightforward, but this should not be at the expense of less prevalent languages, in order to avoid the erosion of culture and the alienation of many countries.
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leads to a more convenient life. It
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the dying out of less spoken dialects acceptable. This essay will
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secondly
the fact that learning a few common
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languages
is unrealistic, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

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language
is not
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a group of spoken words,
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the key to someone’s culture. Dialect has evolved over thousands of years to reflect what it means to be from a particular place.
For example
, the Irish
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language
has one of the widest vocabularies in the world and reflects their tradition of storytelling. Despite this, English has become the
first
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language
of the Irish, as
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, such as English and Chinese, you alienate billions of
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people
throughout the world. English may be common,
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still
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be encouraged
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help
a country become more
economically
competitive.

To conclude
,
commonly
spoken
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may
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make
life more straightforward,
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this should not be at the expense of less prevalent
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languages
, in order to avoid the erosion of culture and the alienation of
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countries.
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Learning is a treasure that will follow its owner everywhere.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Last Tuesday you flew from New York to Paris. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your cabin bag on the plane. Write a letter to the airline: -Where and when you lost your bag-What your bag looks like-What it is contents were v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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