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21. 09. 2017 You have travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are g v.1

21. 09. 2017 You have travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are g v. 1
In this modern world, it is argued by some politicians and authorities that the art classes are crucial for students while others believe that those courses are loss of time. I believe that art classes have significant importance in many ways, such as expanding imagination or being handled multi-tasking works, and this essay will examine both arguments. First of all, in many developed countries, the art classes are a big part of the curriculum of the preliminary and high schools. Moreover, as per an academic article published by the EU says that It has been proven that painting helps children to enlarge their imagination which ensures them to create innovative products or structures in future. For instance, if a student’s drawing expertise has developed in childhood, he would be able to draw the futuristic buildings and might become one of the most popular architects. Furthermore, multi-tasking has been mentioned in almost every job applications’ requirements. In fact, in the same article which aforementioned above states that there are proven relations between multi-handling and playing the piano. On the other hand, students are obliged to join admission test in the last year of preliminary school and high school to enrol the high school and university respectively. In fact, those admission tests only cover math and literature questions, and due to that reason, most of the parents direct their children to study math instead of art courses. Furthermore, some of the famous directors have not studied at art college, instead, they have studied engineering or medicine. For instance, Nuri Bilge Ceylan, the best director in Turkey, studied electronic engineering, then started filming as a hobby and he recorded his first film when he was at 32 years old. In conclusion, in light of the information given above, although there are so rare examples to prove that spending time on art is a loss of time, I am strongly convinced that art classes are crucial and has great importance for children's educational and professional lives. It should not be forgotten that a life without art is like a tree without roots.
In this modern world, it
is argued
by
some
politicians and authorities that the
art
classes
are crucial for students while others believe that those courses are loss of time. I believe that
art
classes
have significant importance in
many
ways, such as expanding imagination or
being handled
multi-tasking works, and this essay will examine both arguments.

First of all
, in
many
developed countries
, the
art
classes
are a
big
part of the curriculum of the preliminary and high
schools
.
Moreover
, as per an academic article published by the EU says that It has
been proven
that painting
helps
children to enlarge their imagination which ensures them to create innovative products or structures
in future
.
For instance
, if a student’s drawing expertise has developed in childhood, he would be able to draw the futuristic buildings and might become one of the most popular architects.
Furthermore
, multi-tasking has
been mentioned
in almost every job applications’ requirements. In fact, in the same article which aforementioned above states that there
are proven
relations between multi-handling and playing the piano.

On the other hand
, students
are obliged
to
join
admission
test
in the last year of preliminary
school
and high
school
to enrol the high
school
and university
respectively
. In fact, those admission
tests
only
cover math and literature questions, and due to that reason, most of the parents direct their children to study math
instead
of
art
courses.
Furthermore
,
some of the
famous
directors have not studied at
art
college,
instead
, they have studied engineering or medicine.
For instance
,
Nuri
Bilge
Ceylan
, the best director in Turkey, studied electronic engineering, then
started
filming as a
hobby and
he recorded his
first
film when he was at 32 years
old
.

In conclusion
, in light of the information
given
above, although there are
so
rare examples to prove that spending time on
art
is a loss of time, I am
strongly
convinced that
art
classes
are crucial and has great importance for children's educational and professional
lives
. It should not
be forgotten
that a life without
art
is like a tree without roots.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 21. 09. 2017 You have travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are g v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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