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It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. v.2

It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. v. 2
Reaching higher heights in Art and sports cannot be attained only through natural talent. It is often argued that natural capability is much needed for success, whilst others disagree with this. This essay agrees that any children can achieve glory through proper guidance and individuals hard work. This essay will discuss both points of views. It is obvious, Gift acquired by birth helps to reach high levels in arts and sports with minimal effort. However, Individuals should have the dedication level and regular practice to achieve a masterpiece in their fields. After, certain level one loses confidence if talent goes away. For example, A famous singer Swetha Mohan was born with natural talent and she gave her first singing stage performance at the age of 7 years which is quite impossible for other children's. However, Many disagree that natural expertise is an ingredient essential to become skilled professionals. One cannot score centuries or create award winning paintings right after birth. Also, one can achieve higher visions than peoples who have the capability from birth. For Example. A famous Indian cricket player MS Dhoni, won the world cup in 2007 and 2011 with the guidance and proper training from batting and bowling coach. Also, with the support from the management board. To conclude, One needs proper training and practise to master any skills. Children's who are working on their weaknesses helps to achieve their goals, instead of depending natural talent.
Reaching higher heights in Art and sports cannot
be attained
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only
through
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natural
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talent
. It is
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often
argued that
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natural
capability is
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much needed
for success, whilst others disagree with this. This essay
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agrees
that any children can
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achieve
glory through proper guidance and individuals
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hard
work. This essay will discuss both points of views.

It is obvious, Gift acquired by birth
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helps
to reach high levels in arts and sports with minimal effort.
However
, Individuals should have the dedication level and regular practice to
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achieve
a masterpiece in their fields. After, certain level one loses confidence if
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talent
goes away.
For example
, A
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famous
singer
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Swetha
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Mohan
was born
with
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natural
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talent and
she gave her
first
singing stage performance at the age of 7 years which is quite impossible for other children's.

However
,
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Many
disagree that
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natural
expertise is an ingredient essential to become skilled professionals. One cannot score centuries or create
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award winning
paintings right after birth.
Also
, one can
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achieve
higher visions than peoples who have the capability from birth.
For Example
. A
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famous
Indian cricket player MS
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Dhoni
, won the world cup in 2007 and 2011 with the guidance and proper training from batting and bowling coach.
Also
, with the support from the management board.

To conclude
, One needs proper training and
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practise
to master any
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skills
. Children's who are working on their weaknesses
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helps
to
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achieve
their goals,
instead
of
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depending on".
depending
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natural
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talent
.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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