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It s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent However it s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist Discuss both these views and give v.1

It s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent However it s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist 1
It is true that the prevalence of technology leads to devastating consequences for the environment. While some individuals claim that a simpler lifestyle can solve these issues, I have a conviction that people still can utilize technology to address such problems. On the one hand, in order to tackle the destructivel environmental effects caused by technological advancements, human beings should accept a simpler lifestyle. Nowadays, by the advent of cars that consume fossil fuel, the commutation of humans becomes more convenient; however, such private transport emits a substantial amount of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere, which has proven to be the main culprit of global warming and ozone depletion. Therefore, in order to alleviate environmental degradation, people should change their lifestyle into a simpler one by using environmentally friendly transportation such as bicycle. Not only does it preserve the environment intact, but it can also be used as a way of exercise to strengthen people’s health condition. On the other hand, I side with those who believe that the utilization of technology can still resolve environmental problems. A more favorable solution is to invest in greener technologies that can mitigate much of the environmental deterioration already done. Scientists have already started working on them and constituted several considerable accomplishments. For example, it is the invention of electric trains. They induce much less air pollution than diesel engines. The cars running on electricity instead of fossil fuel are another auspicious technology that can tackle environmental degradation. Likewise, greener energy sources like wind and solar may soon replace conventional energy sources like coal. In conclusion, I would argue that it is unnecessary for human beings to change their lifestyle into a simpler one, as they can make use of technological advancements to tackle the environmental issues.
It is true that the prevalence of
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technology
leads to devastating consequences for the environment. While
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some
individuals claim that a
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simpler
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lifestyle
can solve these issues, I have a conviction that
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people
still
can utilize
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technology
to address such problems.

On the one hand, in order to tackle the
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destructivel
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environmental
effects caused by technological advancements, human beings should accept a
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simpler
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lifestyle
. Nowadays, by the advent of cars that consume fossil fuel, the commutation of humans becomes more convenient;
however
, such private transport emits a substantial amount of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere, which has proven to be the main culprit of global warming and ozone depletion.
Therefore
, in order to alleviate
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environmental
degradation,
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people
should
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change
their
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lifestyle
into a
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simpler
one by using
environmentally
friendly transportation such as bicycle. Not
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only
does it preserve the environment intact,
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but
it can
also
be
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used
as a way of exercise to strengthen
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people
’s health condition.

On the other hand
, I side with those who believe that the utilization of
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technology
can
still
resolve
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environmental
problems. A more favorable solution is to invest in greener
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technologies
that can mitigate much of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
deterioration already done. Scientists have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
working on them and constituted several considerable accomplishments.
For example
, it is the invention of electric trains. They induce much less air pollution than diesel engines. The cars running on electricity
instead
of fossil fuel are another auspicious
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technology
that can tackle
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
degradation.
Likewise
, greener energy sources like wind and solar may
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
replace conventional energy sources like coal.

In conclusion
, I would argue that it is unnecessary for human beings to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their
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lifestyle
into a
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simpler
one, as they can
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make
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use
of technological advancements to tackle the
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environmental
issues.
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IELTS essay It s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent However it s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist 1

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294 words
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