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It’s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it’s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. v.1

It’s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it’s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. v. 1
One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether artists and sportspeople can only be successful if they are born with natural talent or whether talent can be nurtured. This essay examines this question from both points of view and then states my perspective, being that a combination of both is the key to success. There are people who argue that success can only be achieved by people with natural talent. The main reason for believing this is that success requires having better genes than others. One good illustration of this is Michael Phelps who won Olympic medals in swimming due to having a wider arm span than the average person. We can also see evidence of natural talent in child prodigies who are geniuses whose natural talent shows at a young age. For instance, Mozart was already a gifted pianist giving public performances when he was just five years old. However, it can also be argued that anyone can achieve success with the right coaching. A good example of success due to long hours of coaching is Tiger Woods. He claims that he only become the number one golfer in the world due to his exhausting training schedule. Moreover, there are those who opine that repetitive training can make it seem like a person was born with innate talent. Take leading martial artists, they spend endless hours undertaking guided training which conditions their reflexes through a process called conditioned learning. This principle can be applied in other areas making it seem that the person is gifted yet underpinning their performance is hours of instruction. In conclusion, I believe that both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, I tend to believe that true success only occurs when both conditions are present. Consequently, true brilliance requires a good set of genes as well as the right nurturing of that natural talent and hard work and dedication to one’s field.
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highly
controversial issues
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today
relates to whether artists and sportspeople can
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be successful if they
are born
with
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natural
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talent
or whether
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talent
can
be nurtured
. This essay examines this question from both points of view and then states my perspective, being that a combination of both is the key to success.

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people
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who
argue that
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success
can
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by
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people
with
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natural
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. The main reason for believing this is that
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success
requires having better genes than others. One
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good
illustration of this is Michael Phelps
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who
won Olympic medals in swimming due to having a wider arm span than the average person. We can
also
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see
evidence of
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natural
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talent
in child prodigies
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who
are geniuses whose
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natural
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talent
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shows
at a young age.
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, Mozart was already a gifted pianist giving public performances when he was
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just
five years
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old
.

However
, it can
also
be argued
that anyone can achieve
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success
with the right coaching. A
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good
example of
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success
due to long hours of coaching is Tiger Woods. He claims that he
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only
become the number one golfer in the world due to his exhausting training schedule.
Moreover
, there are those
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who
opine that repetitive training can
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make
it seem like a person
was born
with innate
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talent
. Take leading martial artists, they spend endless hours undertaking guided training which conditions their reflexes through a process called conditioned learning. This principle can
be applied
in other areas making it seem that the person
is gifted
yet
underpinning their performance is hours of instruction.

In conclusion
, I believe that both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that true
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success
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only
occurs when both conditions are present.
Consequently
, true brilliance requires a
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good
set of genes
as well
as the right nurturing of that
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natural
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talent
and
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hard
work and dedication to one’s field.
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IELTS essay It’s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it’s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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