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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v.17

It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 17
Each child in this world comes with a great potential and different children have different talents for various activities. One child may have fantastic talents for sports and someone may have more potential to become a mathematician, musician or an artist. It’s a quite interesting natural phenomenon that we face within the children. To make the world more beautiful and enriched, we should nurture the different thoughts and different innate abilities of children. In my opinion nature and nurture both have the equal role to play for a child to become a successful professional. To begin with, every child reflects his/her abilities at the infant stage and parents can decide their life path. Those children come with natural talents and outshine others. For instance, a child shows more promising performance among the siblings in mathematics even though all of them have got same care and environment. This proves that people have inborn talents that we cannot deny. No doubt proper care and effective teaching method can hone someone's performance but this is not always the case. If training and teaching would have been everything we would certainly recreate great minds like Newton, Einstein, Mozart and Shakespeare every year. From a neutral point of view, it depends on the brain capacity and also with the parent’s care. If the parents are wiser and more talented, we can see their children become more talented. Sometimes it gives a broader outlook of a child's life. They easily absorb the things what they learn from the school as well as from the society. Genetic engineering also confirms that talented parents usually give birth of talented children. However, this does not guarantee that a child of talented a successful parents will always be talented and successful. For this, an outstanding amount of effort and dedication would be required both from the parents and the child. On the contrary, most of the children do not have outstanding inborn talents. They might have some potentials but that cannot be explored until they are engaged in a certain field. Without practice and commitment, many talented individuals do not even explore their potential in their entire life. Thus practice, excellent teaching method and dedication can bring out the best of a child and guide him for the rest of the life. Consequently, children become more talented and experts only if they are engaged in a certain field. For an instance, well-known football player Ronaldo had has his own talents, but he has improved this skill only by proper guidelines and practice. To conclude, talent makes many people stand out of the crowd and helps to perform extraordinary things. However proper care, environment and dedication are also required to create professionals with expertise and kill.
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children
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talents
for various activities. One
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child
may have fantastic
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talents
for sports and someone may have more
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potential
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become
a mathematician, musician or an artist. It’s a quite interesting natural phenomenon that we face within the
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children
. To
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make
the world more
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beautiful
and enriched, we should nurture the
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different
thoughts and
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different
innate abilities of
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children
. In my opinion nature and nurture both have the equal role to play for a
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child
to
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become
a successful professional.

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with, every
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child
reflects his/her abilities at the infant stage and
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parents
can decide their
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life
path. Those
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children
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come
with natural
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talents
and outshine others.
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, a
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child
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shows
more promising performance among the siblings in mathematics
even though
all of them have
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got
same
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care
and environment. This proves that
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people
have inborn
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talents
that we cannot deny. No doubt proper
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care
and effective teaching method can hone someone's performance
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this is not always the case. If training and teaching
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would have been
everything we would
certainly
recreate great minds like Newton, Einstein, Mozart and Shakespeare every year.

From a neutral point of view, it depends on the brain capacity and
also
with the
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parent’s
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care
. If the
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parents
are wiser and more
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talented
, we can
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see
their
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children
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become
more
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talented
.
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it gives a broader outlook of a child's
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life
. They
easily
absorb the things what they learn from the school
as well
as from the society. Genetic engineering
also
confirms that
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talented
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parents
usually
give birth of
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talented
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children
.
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, this does not guarantee that a
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child
of
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talented
a successful
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parents
will always be
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talented
and successful. For this, an outstanding amount of effort and dedication would
be required
both from the
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parents
and the child.

On the contrary
, most of the
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children
do not have outstanding inborn
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talents
. They might have
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talented
individuals do not even explore their
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potential
in their entire
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life
.
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Thus
practice, excellent teaching method and dedication can bring out the best of a
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child
and guide him for the rest of the
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life
.
Consequently
,
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children
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become
more
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talented
and experts
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only
if they
are engaged
in a certain field. For an instance, well-known football player Ronaldo had has his
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talents
,
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but
he has
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improved
this
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skill
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only
by proper guidelines and practice.

To conclude
,
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talent
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makes
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many
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people
stand out of the crowd and
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helps
to perform extraordinary things.
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However
proper
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care
, environment and dedication are
also
required to create professionals with expertise and kill.
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56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 17

Essay
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5 paragraphs
455 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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