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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.6

It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 6
Many people believe that talents are gifted to some people from birth. Others, however, think that anyone can learn anything, and I agree with this point of view. On the one hand, there are groups who consider some talents to be God gifted. Firstly, the people born with such skills do not need much effort and time to learn. They can quickly learn those skills and start performing. Secondly, they perform way better than their counterparts even though they practice far less. For example, the famous musician, John Carter, learnt Piano for only three months and won an international competition in 1998. Thirdly, children born with the special talents have a keen interest in that field from childhood, and do not need any training to become expert in that. They are highly motivated and love to spend time in utilizing their talents. On the other hand, it is believed that anyone can learn any skill. First, anything can be learned by dedication, hard work and motivation. If someone decides to learn something new, he might face difficulties initially, but with time and patience, he can achieve it. For instance, some people have to face failure for long periods to learn singing before they are successful. Moreover, training is also crucial to polish the skill set, and for that, time and resources are required. Lastly, direction also plays an important role. If good direction is provided to individuals, they can learn anything. In conclusion, although some people believe that children are born with specific talents, but in my opinion, anyone can be trained to acquire new skills. With proper training and enough resources, motivated people can achieve the results.
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talents
to be God gifted.
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, the
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people
born with such
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skills
do not need much effort and
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time
to
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learn
. They can
quickly
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learn
those
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skills
and
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start
performing.
Secondly
, they perform way better than their counterparts
even though
they practice far less.
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, the
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musician, John Carter,
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learnt
Piano for
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three months and won an international competition in 1998.
Thirdly
, children born with the special
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talents
have a keen interest in that field from childhood, and do not need any training to become expert in that. They are
highly
motivated and
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love
to spend
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time
in utilizing their talents.

On the other hand
, it
is believed
that anyone can
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learn
any
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skill
.
First
, anything can
be learned
by dedication,
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hard
work and motivation. If someone decides to
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learn
something new, he might face difficulties
initially
,
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but
with
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time
and patience, he can achieve it.
For instance
,
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some
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people
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have to
face failure for long periods to
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learn
singing
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before
they are successful.
Moreover
, training is
also
crucial to polish the
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skill
set, and for that,
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time
and resources
are required
.
Lastly
, direction
also
plays an
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important
role. If
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good
direction
is provided
to individuals, they can
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learn
anything.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
believe that children
are born
with specific
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talents
,
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but
in my opinion, anyone can
be trained
to acquire new
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skills
. With proper training and
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enough
resources, motivated
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people
can achieve the results.
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IELTS essay It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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