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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v.12

It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 12
These days a talent hunt shows are very popular in India. Some people have quite unique talents which are difficult to imagine. For example, a person can create a shadow of different faces of the freedom fighters of India by just using his two hands. It is a debatable topic whether such talents are learned or it is God gifted. Few people are born with a talent. For instance, a two years old child can play multiple drums parallel like a professional musician. I am confident that a child cannot learn such skills at the age of two. Sometimes you inherit such skills from your ancestors. For instance, it is not surprising if a great singer's son can also sing very well. On the other hand, we have a considerable amount of people who are different from their family. For example, a golf world champion belongs to the wrestler’s family. A champion confirmed that his father wanted him to be different than his family. With rigorous training he became would champion at the age of nine. If talent is acquired only by birth than a coaching concept would not have been accepted so widely. It is said that China won 15 medals in one of the Olympic Games. After that, the government started a training program nationwide where kids are being trained in different sports. In two decades China won 15 medals and became number one in that Olympic game. I truly believe that talent can be learned by passion and dedication. We would not have got some of the greatest talents in India like Lata Mangeshkar and Sachin Tendulkar if they stopped trying after their initial failures. If talent is acquired by birth then Mr Amitabh Bachchan would have stopped the acting after continuous nice flop films in the starting of his career, thinking he does not have any inherent acting skill.
These days a
talent
hunt
shows
are
very
popular in India.
Some
people
have quite unique
talents
which are difficult to imagine.
For example
, a person can create a shadow of
different
faces of the freedom fighters of India by
just
using his two hands. It is a debatable topic whether such
talents
are learned
or it is God gifted.

Few
people
are born
with a
talent
.
For instance
, a two years
old
child can play multiple drums parallel like a professional musician. I am confident that a child cannot learn such
skills
at the age of two.
Sometimes
you inherit such
skills
from your ancestors.
For instance
, it is not surprising if a great singer's son can
also
sing
very
well.

On the other hand
, we have a considerable amount of
people
who are
different
from their family.
For example
, a golf world champion belongs to the wrestler’s family. A champion confirmed that his father wanted him to be
different
than
his family. With rigorous training he became would champion at the age of nine.
If
talent
is acquired
only
by birth than a coaching concept would not have been
accepted
so
widely
.

It
is said
that China won 15 medals in one of the Olympic Games. After that, the
government
started
a training program nationwide where kids are
being trained
in
different
sports. In two decades China won 15 medals and became number one in that Olympic game.

I
truly
believe that
talent
can
be learned
by passion and dedication. We would not have
got
some
of the greatest
talents
in India like
Lata
Mangeshkar
and
Sachin
Tendulkar
if they
stopped
trying after their initial failures. If
talent
is acquired
by birth then Mr
Amitabh
Bachchan
would have
stopped
the acting after continuous nice flop films in the starting of his career, thinking he does not have any inherent acting
skill
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 12

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