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Which one you think has more influence on people- the knowledge gained from experience or the knowledge gained from books. v.2

Which one you think has more influence on people- the knowledge gained from experience or the knowledge gained from books. v. 2
"Experience is the best teacher" is an old cliché, and I agree with it since experiences enrich a person’s wisdom and teach him/her invaluable lessons that can never be learned from elsewhere. We can learn a lot of important things from books, and books tell us about the past, present and future, but the most important lessons in life come from our own experiences. Throughout the different stages of life, from primary school to university to adulthood, experience teaches us many skills we need for life. As children in primary school, we learn facts and information from books, but that is not all we learn in school. On the playground, we learn how to make friends. In our class work, we learn how it feels to succeed and what we do when we fail. We start to learn about the things we like to do and the things we don't. We don't learn these things from books, but from our experiences with our friends and classmates. In our university classes, we learn a lot of information and skills we will need for our future careers, but we also learn a lot that is not in our textbooks. In our daily lives both in the class and out of the class, we learn to make decisions for ourselves. We learn to take on responsibilities. We learn to get along with our classmates, our roommates, and our workmates. Our successes and failures help us develop skills we will need in our adult lives. They are skills that no book can teach us. Throughout our adulthood, the experience remains a constant teacher. We may continue to read or take classes for professional development. However, our experiences at work, at home, and with our friends teach us more. The triumphs and disasters of our lives teach us how to improve our careers and also how to improve our relationships and how to be the person each one of us wants to be. Books teach us a lot, but there is a limit to what they teach. They can give us information or show us another person's experiences. These are valuable things, but the lessons we learn from our own experiences, from childhood through adulthood, are the most important ones we learn.
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enrich a person’s wisdom and
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us
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we need for life.

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books
,
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in school. On the playground, we
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how to
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make
friends. In our
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work, we
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how it feels to succeed and what we do when we fail. We
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to
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about the things we like to do and the things we don't. We don't
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these things from
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books
,
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from our
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with our friends and classmates.

In our university
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classes
, we
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of information and
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we will need for our future careers,
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to
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decisions for ourselves. We
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to take on responsibilities. We
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along with our classmates, our roommates, and our workmates. Our successes and failures
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us develop
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skills
we will need in our adult
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that no
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teach
us. Throughout our adulthood, the
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experience
remains a constant teacher. We may continue to read or take
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classes
for professional development.
However
, our
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experiences
at work, at home, and with our friends
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teach
us more. The triumphs and disasters of our
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lives
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us how to
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improve
our careers and
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our relationships and how to be the person each one of us wants to be.

Books
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,
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there is a limit to what they
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. They can give us information or
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show
us another person's
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experiences
. These are valuable things,
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but
the lessons we
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learn
from our
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own
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, from childhood through adulthood, are the most
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ones we
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5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Which one you think has more influence on people- the knowledge gained from experience or the knowledge gained from books. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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