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It It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most people have a credit card, a mortgage and öften they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this a good idea or is it too riske? Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

It It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most people have a credit card, a mortgage and öften they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this a good idea or is it too riske? v. 1
Nowadays, many people have credit cards, mortgages, and loans. Many people believe that taking things on loan is acceptable and it's a good idea. And others, on the contrary, believe the opposite, that this is not the best thing that a person should do. In this essay, I will discuss the two sides and describe my opinion. People who have credit cards believe that this will make their lives easier. First, this will relieve their stress, so they think they can not worry that they do not have money with them, since they always have a credit card with them. They can always easily pay for all their expenses. They do not have to wait, companies provide the best service in the shortest possible time. On the other hand, the decision to have credit cards has its negative drawbacks. First of all, buying things with a credit card, people may have expenses, since they will be charged a percentage. To pay off your account or mortgage, with which people take money on credit for their expenses, people will have to pay a large amount, as an interest fee is charged. This can make people uncomfortable, as they will have to pay off loans over a long period. In the course of this, it can lead people to devalue everything. In conclusion, I would like to say that both sides have their pros and cons. Based on the two descriptions provided, I would like to provide my opinion. I believe that having loans, loans, mortgages is not the best thing, for me it has negative sides. People spend their time and money on the most efficient loan repayments. Also, credit cards can charge deposits, which can also lead to misunderstandings between people.
Nowadays,
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.
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people
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believe
that taking things on
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loan
is acceptable and it's a
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good
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idea
.
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,
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the opposite, that this is not the best thing that a person should do. In this essay, I will discuss the two sides and
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describe
my opinion.

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who have
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credit
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cards
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believe
that this will
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make
their
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lives
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stress
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they
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think
they can not worry that they do not have money with them, since they always have a
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credit
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card
with them. They can always
easily
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pay
for all their expenses. They do not
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have to
wait,
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companies
provide the best service in the shortest possible time.

On the other hand
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credit
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cards
has its
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negative
drawbacks.
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, buying things with a
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credit
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card
,
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people
may have expenses, since they will
be charged
a percentage.

To
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pay
off your account or mortgage, with which
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people
take money on
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credit
for their expenses,
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people
will
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have to
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a large amount, as an interest fee
is charged
. This can
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make
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people
uncomfortable, as they will
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have to
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pay
off
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loans
over a long period. In the course of this, it can lead
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people
to devalue everything.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that both sides have their pros and cons.

Based on the two descriptions provided, I would like to provide my opinion. I
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believe
that having
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loans
,
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loans
, mortgages is not the best thing, for me it has
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negative
sides.
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People
spend their time and money on the most efficient
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loan
repayments.
Also
,
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credit
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cards
can charge deposits, which can
also
lead to misunderstandings between
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people
.
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36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most people have a credit card, a mortgage and öften they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this a good idea or is it too riske? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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