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It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most of people have a credit card a mortgage and often they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this goid idea or is it too risky? Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most of people have a credit card a mortgage and often they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this goid idea or is it too risky? v. 1
Borrowing money from another person has become a common thing. In todays generation this asking nature has been developed more. People holding a credit card or have a mortgage often tend to purchase car even on credit given. This essay will shed light on the positive part of doing this, also will discuss the risk associated with it. At the end I will give my view on this situation. To commence with, use of a credit card to buy something has some merits. Firstly, a person who is in a need of buying their daily necessary item, and do not money can use credit card to buy the product and pay later on. For instance, for a newly employed person buying home would be a arduous task but with the help of credit card he/she can afford to satisfy the basic need. By this way one can live a comfortable life. In addition, some credit card company provide 0% interest rate on the borrowed amount. This can give somewhat relief to customer who will to shop something. Buying daily necessary product during such offer period is a good idea though. On the other side, certain type of risks are also associated with overbuying which is discussed. The credit card companied are offering lucrative discounts as a reason the vulnerable people tend to buy unnecessary item. Due to such nature the debt of that person may augment. If the buyer have no control on his spending the rising debt may someday cause financial anxiety, may commit crime or think to give-up life. For example, research by one of the leading organization of world shows that 21% committed sucide rate is due to their unbearable liability amount. Thus, overshopping may land a person to critical situation. To conclude, buying the important item through a credit card is acceptable but one should know how to have control over this. While, risk linked with this is less if it is used wisely.
Borrowing money from another
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has become a common thing. In
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generation this asking nature has
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more.
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holding a
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credit
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card
or have a mortgage
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often
tend to
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purchase
car even on
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credit
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given
. This essay will shed light on the
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positive
part of doing this,
also
will discuss the
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risk
associated with it. At the
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end
I will give my view on this situation.

To commence with,
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use
of a
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credit
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card
to
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buy
something has
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some
merits.
Firstly
, a
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person
who is in a need of
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buying
their daily necessary item, and do not money can
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use
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credit
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card
to
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buy
the product and pay later on.
For instance
, for a
newly
employed
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person
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buying
home would be
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a
arduous task
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but
with the
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help
of
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credit
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card
he/she can afford to satisfy the basic need. By this way one can
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live
a comfortable life.
In addition
,
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some
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credit
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card
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company
provide 0% interest rate on the borrowed amount. This can give somewhat relief to customer who will to shop something.
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Buying
daily necessary product during such offer period is a
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good
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idea
though.

On the other side, certain type of
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risks
are
also
associated with overbuying which
is discussed
. The
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credit
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card
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companied
are offering lucrative discounts as a reason the vulnerable
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people
tend to
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buy
unnecessary item. Due to such nature the debt of that
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person
may augment. If the buyer have no control on his spending the rising debt may someday cause financial anxiety, may commit crime or
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think
to give-up life.
For example
, research by one of the leading organization of world
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shows
that 21% committed
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sucide
rate is due to their unbearable liability amount.
Thus
,
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overshopping
may land a
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person
to critical situation.

To conclude
,
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buying
the
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important
item through a
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credit
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card
is acceptable
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but
one should know how to have control over this. While,
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risk
linked with this is less if it is
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used
wisely
.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most of people have a credit card a mortgage and often they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this goid idea or is it too risky? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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