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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 1
It is often said that old-fashioned constructions are required more costly budgets to rebuild and upgrade all of them, thus modern structures are considered as a cost-efficiency way accepted by the crowds. To some extent, I totally disagree with this view for some reasons, and the essay will examine these below. Old buildings, have gone through changes in human history, are an existing representative of cultural values in national characteristics. Maybe the best example of this will be Ben Thanh market in Vietnam that was appeared in the early 1914s, and it is a particular symbol of Ho Chi Minh city so far. The market is inspired by French architectural designs and be compounded with some Asian structures so that foreign visitors nowadays can be easily attracted and be implied about heroic reminiscences of Vietnamese history. Besides that, it is obvious that the market itself is a large achievement in terms of preserving an exclusive style of Vietnamese traditional markets and orientating a new direction for Asian nations’ integration in culture. I believe that unfashionable buildings have their own valuable meanings that should be protected from the verge of collapse by human interference. The restoration of previous constructions will help the government to ease national burdens from building latest structures with technological advances. In fact, it will be an ineffective cost-saving way in breaking any old-designed buildings down and then converting them into up-to-date ones. Furthermore, the sudden collapse of these past constructions may lead to a mass of environmental pollutions and also, an aesthetic nature in public will be seriously affected as well. As a result, the government must face with an environmental crisis so that they are forced to reintroduce new compensation policies with more taxations applied directly to citizens. This can rise a widespread discontent in the whole societies, and many problems caused by the idea of constructing contemporary structures towards national budgets will never be ended. In conclusion, I would argue that the past buildings have still created their values in terms of culture and finance, thus these constructions should be preserved as well as be developed by all of generations in the future.
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often
said that
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old
-fashioned
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constructions
are required
more costly budgets to rebuild and upgrade all of them,
thus
modern
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structures
are considered
as a cost-efficiency way
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accepted
by the crowds. To
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some
extent, I
totally
disagree with this view for
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some
reasons, and the essay will examine these below.

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Old
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buildings
, have gone through
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changes
in human history, are an existing representative of cultural values in national characteristics. Maybe the best example of this will be Ben Thanh
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market
in Vietnam that
was appeared
in the early 1914s, and it is a particular symbol of
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Ho Chi Minh city
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so
far. The
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market
is inspired
by French architectural designs and
be compounded
with
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some
Asian
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structures
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so
that foreign visitors nowadays can be
easily
attracted and
be implied
about heroic reminiscences of Vietnamese history.
Besides
that, it is obvious that the
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market
itself is a large achievement in terms of preserving an exclusive style of Vietnamese traditional markets and orientating a new direction for Asian nations’ integration in culture. I believe that unfashionable
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buildings
have their
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own
valuable meanings that should
be protected
from the verge of collapse by human interference.

The restoration of previous
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constructions
will
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help
the
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government
to
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ease
national burdens from
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building
latest
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structures
with technological advances. In fact, it will be an ineffective cost-saving way in breaking any
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old
-designed
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buildings
down and then converting them into up-to-date ones.
Furthermore
, the sudden collapse of these past
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constructions
may lead to a mass of environmental pollutions and
also
, an aesthetic nature in public will be
seriously
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affected
as well
.
As a result
, the
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government
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must
face with an environmental crisis
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so
that they
are forced
to reintroduce new compensation policies with more
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taxations
applied
directly
to citizens. This can rise a widespread discontent in the whole societies, and
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many
problems caused by the
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idea
of constructing contemporary
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structures
towards national budgets will never
be ended
.

In conclusion
, I would argue that the past
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buildings
have
still
created their values in terms of culture and finance,
thus
these
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constructions
should
be preserved
as well
as
be developed
by
Consider using "all generations" or "all of the generations".
all of generations
in the future.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
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