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It is expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

It is expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings modern buildings instead. v. 1
It is argued that spending on old buildings could be more expensive. Instead of the use of money on these, new buildings can have a better option. I totally disagree with the statement because of certain reasons. This essay puts light upon these reasons and end with a reasonable conclusion. To begin with, as time changes with high pace, there are a lot of changes takes place in the lives of people and oil buildings which are the sign of old period. There are many historical buildings which need to improvement because in recent years they lose their lustre due to improper supervision. By providing a sufficient lump sum of money help to the maintaining their importance to the society and help to imprint their historical images to the minds of the coming generation. Furthermore, to repair of old bodies is effective and economical to the new modern buildings. As constructing a novice building, it requires more time and labours. For this, to construct new buildings sometime becomes very costly than older one. Similarly, due to modernisation the apartments are also very expensive. So to think about a fresh building to construct a big problem. However, the demand for Ultratech facilities is being increased with time. In addition to it, the modern buildings have capacity to install the new modern facilities. The older buildings were not designed to achieve the modern facilities power generators. To overcome these problems, a new modern buildings are required. In conclusion, as the old buildings have a unique and an imperative image of history, so they need to improve but sometimes they become expensive too. While to the installation of modern buildings are with new modern facilities less which makes the life more comfortable than earlier.
It
is argued
that spending on
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old
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buildings
could be more expensive.
Instead
of the
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use
of money on these,
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new
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buildings
can have a better option. I
totally
disagree with the statement
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because
of certain reasons. This essay puts light upon these reasons and
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end
with a reasonable conclusion.

To
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begin
with, as time
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changes
with high pace, there are
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a lot of
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changes
takes place in the
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lives
of
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people
and oil
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buildings
which are the
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sign
of
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old
period. There are
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many
historical
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buildings
which need to improvement
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because
in recent years they lose their
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lustre
due to improper supervision. By providing a sufficient lump sum of money
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help
to the maintaining their importance to the society and
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help
to imprint their historical images to the minds of the coming generation.

Furthermore
, to repair of
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old
bodies is effective and economical to the
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new
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modern
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buildings
. As constructing a novice
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building
, it requires more time and
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labours
. For this, to construct
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new
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buildings
sometime becomes
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very
Use "(costly)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
costly
than older one.
Similarly
, due to
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modernisation
the apartments are
also
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very
expensive.
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So
to
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think
about a fresh
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building
to construct a
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big
problem.

However
, the demand for
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Ultratech
facilities is
being increased
with time.
In addition
to it, the
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modern
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buildings
have capacity to install the
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new
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modern
facilities. The older
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buildings
were not designed to achieve the
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modern
facilities power generators. To overcome these problems, a
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new
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modern
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buildings
are required
.

In conclusion
, as the
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old
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buildings
have a unique and an imperative image of history,
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so
they need to
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improve
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but
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sometimes
they become expensive too. While to the installation of
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modern
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buildings
are with
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new
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modern
facilities less which
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makes
the life more comfortable than earlier.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings modern buildings instead. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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