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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 4
It is considered that spending to build modern infrastructures is more appropriate than repairing old establishments because it is more costly. In my opinion, there should be wise budgeting and allocation of resources for both because new and old buildings have important use and contributions to every community, hence not all money should be spent on one side. To begin with, heritage buildings are significant parts of the history and should be preserved. The places where these are situated become tourist attractions and educational destinations, thus, these have great contributions to generate income and student learnings. As a result, money spent to restore and maintain these are not wasted. Moreover, it is important to ensure people’s safety when they visited these buildings, therefore, there should be allotted budget for building maintenance. Additionally, modern establishments are equally important to be able to move with the fast-changing environment, especially in urban areas, where huge corporations and businesses are running. To be able to cope with the competitive world, business owners and investors should consider more to build modernized and high-end towers and structures which also attract skilled and effective employees to work there. Moreover, modern facilities will allow convenience for workers and stakeholders, eventually, these help improve their productivity at work. As a result, these will help boost the overall economy while businesses are working well. In conclusion, as both traditional and high-end buildings share worthy contribution to our society, there should be sensible expenditure to allocate on repairing and building old and modern infrastructures.
It
is considered
that spending to build
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modern
infrastructures is more appropriate than repairing
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old
establishments
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because
it is more costly. In my opinion, there should be wise budgeting and allocation of resources for both
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because
new and
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old
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buildings
have
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important
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use
and contributions to every community,
hence
not all money should
be spent
on one side.

To
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begin
with, heritage
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buildings
are significant parts of the history and should
be preserved
. The places where these
are situated
become tourist attractions and educational destinations,
thus
, these have great contributions to generate income and student learnings.
As a result
, money spent to restore and maintain these are not wasted.
Moreover
, it is
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important
to ensure
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s safety when they visited these
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buildings
,
therefore
, there should
be allotted
budget for
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building
maintenance.

Additionally
,
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modern
establishments are
equally
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important
to be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
with the
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fast
-changing environment,
especially
in urban areas, where huge corporations and businesses are running. To be able to cope with the competitive world, business owners and investors should consider more to build modernized and high-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
towers and structures which
also
attract skilled and effective employees to work there.
Moreover
,
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modern
facilities will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
convenience for workers and stakeholders,
eventually
, these
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help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their productivity at work.
As a result
, these will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
boost the
overall
economy while businesses are working well.

In conclusion
, as both traditional and high-
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end
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
share worthy contribution to our society, there should be sensible expenditure to allocate on repairing and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
infrastructures.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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