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It is too expensive to look after and repair old building, this money should be spent on building modern architecture instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

It is too expensive to look after and repair old building, this money should be spent on building modern architecture instead. v. 1
Every country has its history which can be understood with the help of old buildings. As per the stated notion, there are people who believe in replacing the ancient buildings with the modern one's because they feel that it would be more cost effective to invest on modern buildings rather than on old one's. Apparently, the ancient buildings hold historic values and should be preserved. The most prominent espousing reason to preserve historical places is that, the monuments are more attractive and fascinating to new generations. For better understanding, students with historical background studies past events which makes them curious to see and feel, how the events had taken place. To support the latter, in place of showing images and telling stories about the Taj Mahal, a tour to Taj Mahal will be more effective. Another notable reason is, historical structures attract tourism. Undoubtedly, restoration of ancient construction has a direct impact on jobs for local people. A globe trotter is always searching for quality, structure to explore and indirectly help local individuals in earning. To illustrate, one will need a guide who can explain history, food, hotel to stay and nearby markets to shop. In an addendum to above, building a new architecture by replacing earlier ones will require a lot of money and non-renewable resources. And, by demolishing the previous architecture, we will lose our great leader's remains, and will leave the new generation clueless. It can be accentuated that, prehistoric structures has educational and historic value. Evidently, ancient structures help to boost tourism and ultimately economy of a country.
Every country has its history which can
be understood
with the
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help
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
. As per the stated notion, there are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who believe in replacing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
with the modern one's
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they feel that it would be more cost effective to invest on modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
rather
than on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
one's.
Apparently
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
hold historic values and should
be preserved
.

The most prominent espousing reason to preserve historical places is that, the monuments are more attractive and fascinating to new generations. For better understanding, students with historical background studies past
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them curious to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
and feel, how the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
had taken place. To support the latter, in place of showing images and telling stories about the Taj Mahal, a tour to Taj Mahal will be more effective.

Another notable reason is, historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
structures
attract tourism.
Undoubtedly
, restoration of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ancient
construction has a direct impact on jobs for local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. A globe trotter is always searching for quality,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
structure
to explore and
indirectly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
local individuals in earning. To illustrate, one will need a guide who can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
history, food, hotel to stay and nearby markets to shop.

In an addendum to above,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
a new architecture by replacing earlier ones will require
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money and non-renewable resources. And, by demolishing the previous architecture, we will lose our great leader's remains, and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the new generation clueless.

It can
be accentuated
that, prehistoric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
structures
has educational and historic value.
Evidently
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
structures
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to boost tourism and
ultimately
economy of a country.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old building, this money should be spent on building modern architecture instead. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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