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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both side and give your opinion. v.2

It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 2
Dwelling in the suburbs or village has been a constant debatable issue for the years. While some opine that living in the city is more beneficial, others have a view that living in town offer more advantages. I, however, agree with the latter view because of less health issues and On the one hand, it is thought by some that city dwellers have a better lifestyle as people living in the big cities have a good job opportunities, higher tertiary education for their children and better medical facilities as compared to the villages. For instance, a recent survey conducted by Oxford University found that 69% of total population seems to shift from small village to big cities in order to have better university education and job prospects. Therefore, such benefits attract a lot of stress and anxiety, which gives me a valid reason not to agree with this view. On the other hand, others believe that people living in a town have many positive aspects because not only do they not have to deal with traffic issues while commuting from home to work, but also they are less likely to face health issues which are absolutely the biggest drawbacks of living in the cities. For instance, a recent article in the Times of India in March 2019 reveals that citizens of the countryside are much healthier and fit than city dwellers due to less population resides in villages. Thus, I agree with this view countryside imparts a better life. In conclusion, despite getting a better education and job prospects, I believe living in the countryside is more advantageous as people tend to save time without sticking in the traffic and keeps themselves fit and healthy.
Dwelling in the suburbs or
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village
has been a constant debatable
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issue
for the years. While
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some
opine that
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living
in the city is more beneficial, others have a view that
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living
in town offer more advantages. I,
however
,
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agree
with the latter view
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because
of less health
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issues
and

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thought
by
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some
that city dwellers have a
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better
lifestyle as
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people
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living
in the
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big
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cities
have a
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good
job opportunities, higher tertiary education for their children and
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better
medical facilities as compared to the
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villages
.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Oxford University found that 69% of total population seems to shift from
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small
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village
to
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big
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cities
in order to have
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better
university education and job prospects.
Therefore
, such benefits attract
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a lot of
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stress
and anxiety, which gives me a valid reason not to
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agree
with this view.

On the other hand
, others believe that
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people
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living
in a town have
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many
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positive
aspects
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not
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do they not
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have to
deal with traffic
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issues
while commuting from home to work,
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but
also
they are less likely to face health
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issues
which are
absolutely
the biggest drawbacks of
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living
in the
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cities
.
For instance
, a recent article in
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the Times of India
in March 2019 reveals that citizens of the countryside are much healthier and fit than city dwellers due to less population resides in
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villages
.
Thus
, I
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agree
with this view countryside imparts a
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better
life.

In conclusion
, despite getting a
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better
education and job prospects, I believe
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living
in the countryside is more advantageous as
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people
tend to save time without sticking in the traffic and
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keeps
themselves fit and healthy.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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