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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 1
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument about the topic that grasping knowledge from a group is more efficient than individually. The majority of people favour it, however, the rest opposes it. I firmly believe that group learning is much better than learning alone. There are plenty of reasons in favour of this argument. Firstly, group studying helps to brainstorm ideas. In simple words, in a group there will lots of students or individuals with a wide range of ideas. All these idea's can be discussed, due to that, lots of solutions can be found for one single problem. Moreover, while adopting this method, helps the individual to learn fast and much better than learning alone. For example, a recent study conducted by some universities concluded that around 75 percent of students are now focusing on group studies rather than studying individually. Because, they believe that it helps their rate of studying by 50 percent. Secondly, group studying is more entertaining and less boring. Because the students are able to conduct lots of games like memory game, quiz, all of these helps students from boring subjects for a short period of time and they can start with a refreshed mind again. In addition, studying through entertainment is an efficient way of learning new ideas, which they will not forget their whole life. For instance, children from group studies are able to grab much more higher positions in various industries like NASA, GOOGLE etc. However, individual studies have a slight advantage that, students can have more focus on studies rather than loose talks with friends. To recapitulate, I personally believe that group studies are emerging to be a more efficient and interesting way of learning. There is no reasonable arguments against this very phenomenon.
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument about the topic that grasping knowledge from a
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group
is more efficient than
individually
. The majority of
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people
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favour
it,
however
, the rest opposes it. I
firmly
believe that
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group
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learning
is much better than
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learning
alone.

There are
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plenty
of reasons in
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favour
of this argument.
Firstly
,
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group
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studying
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helps
to brainstorm
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ideas
. In simple words, in a
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group
there will lots of
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students
or individuals with a wide range of
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ideas
. All these
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idea
's can
be discussed
, due to that, lots of solutions can
be found
for one single problem.
Moreover
, while adopting this method,
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helps
the individual to learn
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fast
and much better than
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learning
alone.
For example
, a recent
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study
conducted by
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some
universities concluded that around 75 percent of
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students
are
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now
focusing on
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group
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studies
rather
than
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studying
individually
.
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Because
, they believe that it
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helps
their rate of
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studying
by 50 percent.

Secondly
,
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group
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studying
is more entertaining and less boring.
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Because
the
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students
are able to conduct lots of games like memory game, quiz, all of these
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helps
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students
from boring subjects for a short period of
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time and
they can
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start
with a refreshed mind again.
In addition
,
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studying
through entertainment is an efficient way of
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learning
new
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ideas
, which they will not forget their whole life.
For instance
, children from
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group
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studies
are able to grab much
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more higher
positions in various industries like NASA, GOOGLE etc.
However
, individual
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studies
have a slight advantage that,
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students
can have more focus on
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studies
rather
than loose talks with friends.

To recapitulate, I
personally
believe that
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group
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studies
are emerging to be a more efficient and interesting way of
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learning
. There is no reasonable arguments against this
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very
phenomenon.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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