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The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office.
We have been the witness of urban development during the current era. The construction sector is transforming the entire civilization into a different direction where every single facility will be within a walking distance. So that anyone can avail it during emergencies. This essay will elaborate the positive points in first section and in second part you are able to get to know what the disadvantages are after such urbanization. Coming to the section, as per my standard points, urbanization helps the society to grow in another beautiful direction which not only provides us a modern lifestyle but also assures one to bring balance to a daily schedule. Mostly, this category of society is raising up near the Information Technology sectors which is reducing the gap between office and home place. For example, in Kolkata, the Sapoorji Paloonji raised up a few years back with numerous facilities such as public & children's park, a swimming pool, various sports areas & shopping centre. With all the facilities where people would love to stay there in order to balance their life with tight work schedule. In short, to spend free time with family members, such developments is required nowadays for maintaining a healthy lifestyle. In other hand, in order to make our life easy and comfortable we are losing space for the cultivation which is affecting the entire farming system. As fertile land areas, decreasing, our entire civilization may lack of having naturally growing crops & vegetables. In short, while planning to transform our life to other paths, we must keep in mind the entire farming system. In conclusion, modernization extends crucial for our lifestyle, but to some it can be harmful when we cannot save the fertile land for crops and grains.
We have been the witness of urban development during the
current
era. The construction sector is transforming the
entire
civilization into a
different
direction where every single facility will be within a walking distance.
So that
anyone can avail it during emergencies. This essay will elaborate the
positive
points in
first
section and in second part you are able to
get
to know what the disadvantages are after such urbanization.

Coming to the section, as per my standard points, urbanization
helps
the society to grow in another
beautiful
direction which not
only
provides us a modern lifestyle
but
also
assures one to bring balance to a daily schedule.
Mostly
, this category of society is raising up near the Information Technology sectors which is reducing the gap between office and home place.
For example
, in Kolkata, the
Sapoorji
Paloonji
raised up a few years back with numerous facilities such as public & children's park, a swimming pool, various sports areas & shopping
centre
. With all the facilities where
people
would
love
to stay there in order to balance their life with tight work schedule. In short, to spend free time with family members, such developments
is required
nowadays for maintaining a healthy lifestyle.

In other hand, in order to
make
our life easy and comfortable we are losing space for the cultivation which is affecting the
entire
farming system. As fertile land areas, decreasing, our
entire
civilization may lack of having
naturally
growing crops & vegetables. In short, while planning to transform our life to other paths, we
must
keep
in mind the
entire
farming system.

In conclusion
, modernization extends crucial for our lifestyle,
but
to
some
it can be harmful when we cannot save the fertile land for crops and grains.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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