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It is the responsibility of a government to protect its citizens from natural disasters. v.5

It is the responsibility of a government to protect its citizens from natural disasters. v. 5
It is believed that a government should be responsible for the safety of its residents during natural disasters such as tsunami or volcano eruption. I personally agree with the statement, and the following essay will discuss in details regarding the statement. To begin with, it is mandatory for the government to protect its people during the natural disaster. It is undeniable that the existence of the citizens has given significant contribution the development of a nation. Taxes that are collected from these people have been used to develop public facilities, expand new areas and funding public education. Without the existence of the residents, the country would have no support, no development and no fund. From the humanity perspective, people are born and created as a social person, which means that people will interact, communicate and help each other. And during natural disasters such as typhoon, hurricane or earthquake, there will be a lot of people who found themselves in difficult conditions. They might have lost their family members and relatives, lost their properties and even some of them were injured condition. For the sake of humanity, the government should provide aids to their residents during these inconvenience events. They could provide emergency rescues, temporary accommodations and provide foods for their people. And once the disaster has passed, the government could help the residents by assisting them in rebuilding their homes. The government's responsibilities include broadcasting the forecast of any disaster and by improving the shelter system in natural disaster prone areas. In conclusion, I personally agree that the government must help its residents during any natural disaster since citizens have made contributions to the government through taxes. Besides that, I believed that from the humanity point of view, we should help and take care of each other.
It
is believed
that a
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government
should be responsible for the safety of its
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residents
during
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natural
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disasters
such as tsunami or volcano eruption. I
personally
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agree
with the statement, and the following essay will discuss in
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details
regarding the statement.

To
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begin
with, it is mandatory for the
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government
to protect its
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people
during the
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natural
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disaster
. It is undeniable that the existence of the citizens has
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given
significant contribution the development of a nation. Taxes that
are collected
from these
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people
have been
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used
to develop public facilities, expand new areas and funding public education. Without the existence of the
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residents
, the country would have no support, no development and no fund.

From the humanity perspective,
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people
are born
and created as a social person, which means that
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people
will interact, communicate and
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help
each other. And during
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natural
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disasters
such as typhoon, hurricane or earthquake, there will be
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a lot of
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people
who found themselves in difficult conditions. They might have lost their family members and relatives, lost their properties and even
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some
of them
were injured
condition. For the sake of humanity, the
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government
should provide aids to their
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residents
during these inconvenience
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events
. They could provide emergency rescues, temporary accommodations and provide foods for their
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people
. And once the
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disaster
has passed, the
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government
could
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help
the
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residents
by assisting them in rebuilding their homes.

The
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government
's responsibilities include broadcasting the forecast of any
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disaster
and by improving the shelter system in
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natural
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disaster
prone areas.

In conclusion
, I
personally
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agree
that the
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government
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must
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help
its
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residents
during any
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natural
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disaster
since citizens have made contributions to the
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government
through taxes.
Besides
that, I believed that from the humanity point of view, we should
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help
and take care of each other.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is the responsibility of a government to protect its citizens from natural disasters. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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