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It is the responsibility of a government to protect its citizens from natural disasters. v.2

It is the responsibility of a government to protect its citizens from natural disasters. v. 2
As much as the Nature is beautiful, it can wreck havoc and the resulting natural disasters often do not come with a warning.   A natural disaster can hit a region any time and it is always thought to be a responsibility of the local government to protect their people from it. According to me, the government can be held responsible for a disaster that was predicted and could have been averted. For e. g. floods. A region that has high a rainfall prediction has a high possibility of being flooded. Such regions should have more dams built which can control the excess water due to rain. Similarly, regions with low rainfall prediction should have advanced facilities like rain-water harvesting so that the people can get adequate water for drinking, farming, etc. Having said this, the government may not be able to protect their people in all natural disasters for e. g. a tsunami, a volcanic eruption or a hurricane. A few years back two countries in Asia namely Sri Lanka and India were on the receiving end of the wrath of nature in the form of Tsunami. Thousands of people died and there was a substantial loss of property and livestock as well. Similarly, The United States has witnessed many cyclones in history and the people have suffered a lot of damage despite The States being the most powerful country in the world with a strong government at the helm. The citizens should be aware and take responsibility as well. Local governments of the natural disaster-prone areas should take additional steps to forecast and broadcast the news to minimise the natural disaster. The forecasting system and technology related to weather forecasting should be updated to take precaution so that people of the area get the news before the disaster hit the area. The government should allocate a budget and manpower to help the victim of the natural disaster. Thus the devastating outcome of the natural calamities can often be reduced. Thus, in conclusion, I feel that government should be responsible for the safety of its people but in some cases, it fails to do so against nature.
As much as the Nature is
beautiful
, it can
wreck havoc
and the resulting
natural
disasters
often
do not
come
with a warning.
 
A
natural
disaster
can hit a
region
any time and it is always
thought
to be a responsibility of the local
government
to protect their
people
from it.

According to me
, the
government
can
be held
responsible for a
disaster
that
was predicted
and could have
been averted
. For
e. g.
floods. A
region
that has high a rainfall prediction has a high possibility of
being flooded
. Such
regions
should have more dams built which can control the excess water due to rain.
Similarly
,
regions
with low rainfall prediction should have advanced facilities like rain-water harvesting
so
that the
people
can
get
adequate water for drinking, farming, etc.

Having said this, the
government
may not be able to protect their
people
in all
natural
disasters
for
e. g.
a tsunami, a volcanic eruption or a hurricane. A few years back two countries in Asia
namely
Sri Lanka and India were on the receiving
end
of the wrath of nature in the form of Tsunami. Thousands of
people
died
and there was a substantial loss of property and livestock
as well
.
Similarly
, The United States has witnessed
many
cyclones in history and the
people
have suffered
a lot of
damage despite The States being the most powerful country in the world with a strong
government
at the helm.

The citizens should be aware and take responsibility
as well
. Local
governments
of the
natural
disaster-prone areas should take additional steps to forecast and broadcast the news to
minimise
the
natural
disaster
. The forecasting system and technology related to weather forecasting should
be updated
to take precaution
so
that
people
of the area
get
the news
before
the
disaster
hit the area. The
government
should allocate a budget and manpower to
help
the victim of the
natural
disaster
.
Thus
the devastating outcome of the
natural
calamities can
often
be
reduced
.

Thus
,
in conclusion
, I feel that
government
should be responsible for the safety of its
people
but
in
some
cases, it fails to do
so
against nature.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is the responsibility of a government to protect its citizens from natural disasters. v. 2

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  American English
5 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
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