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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use specific reasons to explain your view. v.1

It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use specific reasons to explain your view. v. 1
Borrowing money is usually considered as an awkward situation. Some people even think that it might lead to the disruption of their beautiful relationships with their friends. However, I think this idea depends on how close the lender and the borrower are and the amount of money lent. First of all, whether borrowing money from friend cause harm to the relationship or not may depend on the level of companionship between them. If they are close friends, then they would always be willing to provide help to each other as long as it is within their abilities, including money. This seems to cause no harm to their beautiful friendship. However, if a person asks a casual friend, a classmate for example, for a loan, it may not be so easy. There might not be enough trust between them for borrowing money to the other. The friend may have a bad impression about the borrower. Moreover, the amount of money borrowed might also have an effect. In the case the loan is just a small one, say, the bill of a cup of coffee, it causes no damage to the relationship. In the other hand, if a friend borrow a person a big pile of cash, he or she is likely to have an unpleasant feeling. Then, their friendship may be put on the verge of ruin. Some others may argue that people should avoid borrowing their friends’ money to prevent the destruction of their friendships. However, I think that this is not a good idea since everyone might get some financial troubles in their lifetime. Then, they can ask for help from friends to overcome their problems, and try to return it as soon as possible. In conclusion, I believe borrowing money seems to not destroy a friendship as long as the friends are close and the loan is not too big. Moreover, if the debt is repaid on time, the relationship will still be good.
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depends on how close the lender and the borrower are and the amount of
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lent.

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First of all
, whether
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borrowing
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money
from
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friend
cause harm to the
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relationship
or not may depend on the level of companionship between them. If they are close
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friends
, then they would always be willing to provide
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help
to each
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other
as long as it is within their abilities, including
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money
. This seems to cause no harm to their
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beautiful
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friendship
.
However
, if a person asks a casual
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friend
, a classmate
for example
, for a loan, it may not be
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easy. There
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not be
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trust between them for
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borrowing
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money
to the
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other
. The
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friend
may have a
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bad
impression about the borrower.

Moreover
, the amount of
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borrowed
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also
have an effect. In the case the loan is
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a
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small
one, say, the bill of a cup of coffee, it causes no damage to the
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relationship
. In the
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other
hand, if a
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friend
borrow a person a
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pile of cash, he or she is likely to have an unpleasant feeling. Then, their
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friendship
may
be put
on the verge of ruin.

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others may argue that
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should avoid
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their
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friends’
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money
to
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the destruction of their
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friendships
.
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, I
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think
that this is not a
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since everyone
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financial troubles in their lifetime. Then, they can
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ask for
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help
from
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friends
to overcome their problems, and try to return it as
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soon
as possible.

In conclusion
, I believe
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borrowing
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money
seems to not
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destroy
a
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friendship
as long as the
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friends
are close and the loan is not too
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big
.
Moreover
, if the debt is repaid on time, the
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relationship
will
still
be
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good
.
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37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use specific reasons to explain your view. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
326 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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