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Think critically about the following statement. A universal language should replace all languages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of a universal language v.2

Think critically about the following statement. A universal language should replace all languages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of a universal language v. 2
Education is a weapon which can be used to change the world for good. Few people opine History, as one of the most important subject’s in today’s era, whereas others argue that science and technological subjects are the need of the hour. This essay will discuss both aspects and will be followed by my opinion. Change is a continuous process and history defines that. Studying history gives knowledge about ancient civilizations, the culture and tradition which people have been following for ages. It gives information about the battles and wars fought, social reforms brought to society and the industrial revolution. For instance, people in Harappa civilization used pottery items and had a smart planning for the construction of city. Various festivals like Diwali, Christmas etc. are celebrated with great zeal and practices associated with it is still widely followed. The younger generation gets the information about the World wars and the world past. All this is important because one should never forget his/her roots. On the other hand, a section of people believes that because we are living in such a high paced world where everything is ‘just a click away’ it becomes imperative that science and technology should be given more importance. The future is all digital therefore the focus should be on computer skills, usage of electronics and programming to solve complex problems and to maximize the output with limited amount of resources. For example, fast communication is possible through WhatsApp and Skype. Parking spaces are fitted with solar roof panels which uses energy from the sun. It can be used in applications related to space and astronomy. Although History and subjects like science and technology are an important part of school curriculum I believe that science and technology is more important than history and the reason is that History is distorted. It is written by the winners and doesn’t account for accurate information. The need of the hour is to focus more on sustainable development which produces maximum output by using very limited resources. Science and technology is the future.
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, as one of the most
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subject
’s in
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today
’s era, whereas others argue that
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science
and technological subjects are the need of the hour. This essay will discuss both aspects and will
be followed
by my opinion.

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Change
is a continuous process and
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history
defines that. Studying
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history
gives knowledge about ancient civilizations, the culture and tradition which
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people
have been following for ages. It gives information about the battles and wars fought, social reforms brought to society and the industrial revolution.
For instance
,
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people
in
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Harappa
civilization
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used
pottery items and had a smart planning for the construction of city. Various festivals like Diwali, Christmas etc.
are celebrated
with great zeal and practices associated with it is
still
widely
followed. The younger generation
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gets
the information about the
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World
wars and the
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world
past. All this is
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important
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because
one should never forget his/her roots.

On the other hand
, a section of
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people
believes that
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because
we are living in such a high paced
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world
where everything is ‘
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just
a click away’ it becomes imperative that
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science
and
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technology
should be
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given
more importance. The future is all digital
therefore
the focus should be on computer
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skills
, usage of electronics and programming to solve complex problems and to maximize the output with limited amount of resources.
For example
,
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fast
communication is possible through WhatsApp and Skype. Parking spaces
are fitted
with solar roof panels which
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uses
energy from the sun. It can be
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used
in applications related to space and astronomy.

Although
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History
and subjects like
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science
and
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technology
are an
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important
part of school curriculum I believe that
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science
and
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technology
is more
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important
than
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history
and the reason is that
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History
is distorted
. It
is written
by the winners and doesn’t account for accurate information. The need of the hour is to focus more on sustainable development which produces maximum output by using
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very
limited resources.
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Science
and
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technology
is the future.
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IELTS essay Think critically about the following statement. A universal language should replace all languages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of a universal language v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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