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it is seen that people are earning higher salaries which is good for country but some believe that their salaries must be reduced, discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

it is seen that people are earning higher salaries which is good for country but some believe that their salaries must be reduced, 1
Nowadays, many people are interested in travelling to other parts of the world. This trend is becoming alarmingly high when compared to the figures of people travelling in the past. This essay will discuss the possible reasons responsible for this first, and then examine the benefits of travelling. To begin, there are a number of reasons why people travel. Some people, most especially the youths travel as a form of entertainment and relaxation. Let us Use the case of honeymoon as an example, more and more newly wedded couples prefer to travel far away in order to enjoy their honeymoon phase. In addition, some people travel for educational purposes, so as to gain new knowledge and experience. To illustrate this, in recent times, a vast majority of students are now applying to study abroad both at undergraduate and postgraduate levels. As discussed above, travelling is beneficial to both the travellers and the economy as a whole. Undoubtedly, many travellers do enjoy the pleasure to see a new scenario. In fact, new ideas and cultures are part of the many things experienced by them. For example, at one time or the other, I believe we have all had a relative or friend who travelled and brought back useful souvenirs from their destinations. Furthermore, travelling adds benefits to the society, as travelling agencies gain from such tours, it keeps them in business, which in turn lowers the unemployment rate. These agencies in turn pay taxes to the government, hence the society also gains indirectly. In conclusion, this essay has enumerated the various reasons why people travel and the benefits therein for both travellers and the society at large.
Nowadays,
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to other parts of the world. This trend is becoming
alarmingly
high when compared to the figures of
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people
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in the past. This essay will discuss the possible reasons responsible for this
first
, and then examine the benefits of travelling.

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, there are a number of reasons why
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.
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, most
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as a form of entertainment and relaxation.
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the case of honeymoon as an example, more and more
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wedded couples prefer to
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travel
far away in order to enjoy their honeymoon phase.
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,
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people
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for educational purposes,
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gain new knowledge and experience. To illustrate this, in recent times, a vast majority of students are
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applying to study abroad both at undergraduate and postgraduate levels.

As discussed above,
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is beneficial to both the
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travellers
and the economy as a whole.
Undoubtedly
,
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travellers
do enjoy the pleasure to
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a new scenario. In fact, new
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ideas
and cultures are part of the
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many
things experienced by them.
For example
, at one time or the other, I believe we have all had a relative or friend who travelled and brought back useful souvenirs from their destinations.
Furthermore
,
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travelling
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adds
benefits to the society, as
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agencies gain from such tours, it
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keeps
them in business, which in turn lowers the unemployment rate. These agencies in turn pay taxes to the
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government
,
hence
the society
also
gains
indirectly
.

In conclusion
, this essay has enumerated the various reasons why
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people
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travel
and the benefits therein for both
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travellers
and the society at large.
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IELTS essay it is seen that people are earning higher salaries which is good for country but some believe that their salaries must be reduced, 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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