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ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic In the modern world the image photograph or film is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word To what extent do you agree or disagree Give reasons for v.1

ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task In the modern world the image photograph or film is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word Give reasons for v. 1
In the modern world, university education is essential for every individual to achieve life goals and dreams. However, enrolled in the university for poor people is no longer an easy task due to extreme competition among modern students. But I believe money can buy an education, so I will not fully agree with this statement. Firstly, many universities around the world that provide quality education. Therefore, numerous students travel to complete their studies by finding their desired campus. In other word, student those who have money able to do their studies without hesitation while the poor struggle with their financial issues. Lack of resources is another issue some of the individuals facing difficult lifestyle. For an instant, a typical student's needs are higher than ordinary people who need equipment like study materials, laptops, books, food, and accommodation. Secondly, In the modern world, there are many private universities, which provide private education. Even the teenager who not at university-level, with money they can conduct their studies enrolling with the campus. But some poor students unable to complete their college education properly as a result of that they miss university education. An example, without a quality lifestyle some children will not able to complete their primary education even they are extremely intelligent. And those who have to join the workforce early due to family issues, consequently, they miss their education. Finally, I argue that with grate financial background opens a party to university even any condition. But students who suffering from poorly hard to access any kind of campus due to the numerous problems. However, it is known many leaders and famous characters have come form low-level background.
In the modern world,
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university
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education
is essential for every individual to achieve life goals and dreams.
However
, enrolled in the
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university
for poor
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
is
no longer an easy task due to extreme competition among modern
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students
.
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But
I believe money can
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buy
an
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education
,
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so
I will not
fully
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agree
with this statement.

Firstly
,
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many
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universities
around the world that provide quality
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education
.
Therefore
, numerous
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students
travel to complete their
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studies
by finding their desired campus. In other word,
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student
those
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who
have money able to do their
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studies
without hesitation while the poor struggle with their financial issues. Lack of resources is another issue
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
individuals facing difficult lifestyle. For an instant, a typical student's needs are higher than ordinary
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people
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who
need equipment like
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study
materials, laptops, books, food, and accommodation.

Secondly
, In the modern world, there are
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many
private
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universities
, which provide private
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education
. Even the
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teenager
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who
not at university-level, with money they can conduct their
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studies
enrolling with the campus.
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But
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some
poor
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students
unable to complete their college
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education
properly
as a result
of that they miss
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university
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education
. An example, without a quality lifestyle
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some
children will not able to complete their primary
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education
even they are
extremely
intelligent. And those
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who
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have to
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join
the workforce early due to family issues,
consequently
, they miss their education.

Finally
, I argue that with grate financial background opens a party to
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university
even any condition.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
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students
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
suffering from
poorly
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hard
to access any kind of campus due to the numerous problems.
However
, it
is known
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many
leaders and
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famous
characters have
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come
form low-level background.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task In the modern world the image photograph or film is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word Give reasons for v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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