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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree? v.7

It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. v. 7
In the modern world, citizens argue about how to preserve nature. Some people believe that governmental funding for protecting habitats is a waste of money. They reckon to think that it is better to redirect the government expenses on natural heritage to other fields such as health care and education. However, there are some individuals who believe that it is essential for the next generation and present people to protect wild animals and plants. On the one hand, people should take action to protect wildlife because it is crucial for upcoming generations. In this regard, descendants have a right to observe and see all kinds of animals and plants, especially endangered animals. Due to some unconscious people, many types of animals and plants become extinct. For example, lions in Africa disappeared because of illegal hunting and logging activities of the local community. On the other hand, It is true that the factors which define economic growth are health care and education, and it is clear that some people are willing to improve these facilities. Because of the overfond for natural heritages, citizens are suffering from lack of adequate health care facilities and educational problems. For example, Brazilian people are struggling of food shortage. The authorities introduced a special law to protect Amazonia rainforest from deforestation process, and because of this law people cannot plant the seeds in this region. In conclusion, although many people tend to think that wild nature conservation is unnecessary for communities, personally, I believe that it is our responsibility to protect wildlife. In addition to this, many animals and plants need to be protected.
In the modern world, citizens argue about how to preserve nature.
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Some
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people
believe that governmental funding for protecting habitats is a waste of money. They reckon to
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think
that it is better to redirect the
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government
expenses on natural heritage to other fields such as health care and education.
However
, there are
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some
individuals who believe that it is essential for the
next
generation and present
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people
to
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protect
wild
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animals
and plants.

On the one hand,
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people
should take action to
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protect
wildlife
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because
it is crucial for upcoming generations. In this regard, descendants have a right to observe and
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see
all kinds of
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animals
and
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plants
,
especially
endangered
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animals
. Due to
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some
unconscious
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people
,
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many
types of
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animals
and
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plants
become extinct.
For example
, lions in Africa disappeared
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because
of illegal hunting and logging activities of the local community.

On the other hand
, It is true that the factors which define economic growth are health care and education, and it is
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clear
that
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some
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people
are willing to
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improve
these facilities.
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Because
of the overfond for natural heritages, citizens are suffering from lack of adequate health care facilities and educational problems.
For example
, Brazilian
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people
are struggling of food shortage. The authorities introduced a special law to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
protect
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Amazonia
rainforest from deforestation process, and
because of this
law
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people
cannot
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plant
the seeds in this region.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
tend to
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think
that wild nature conservation is unnecessary for communities,
personally
, I believe that it is our responsibility to
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protect
wildlife.
In addition
to this,
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
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plants
need to
be protected
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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