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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife while there are other problems that are more important Do you agree or disagree v.6

It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife while there are other problems that are more important v. 6
Nowadays, pupil can study a several number of subjects in school. While some people argue that History is essentially subject in school, others believe Science and Technology are matchless. Although History might be such as patterns in our further life, in my opinion Science and Technology overweight in this situation. First of all, History is one of the best fields that will help us know about our past and build our future. For instance, from the past it is clear that, force of gravity has been invented by Isaac Newton. Furthermore, the king of medicine Avicenna is known by his book which preserved from ancient times. Also, History provides us with a great number of information which we can use in our future. The world population has already known about World War I and World War II and its devastating consequences. So, History provides us with examples that what is wrong and what is correct. Regarding to Science and Technology, these subjects have operated almost every field. Firstly, these subjects make our life less challenging. Computers, telephones, the internet, laser surgery are one of the examples of such cases. Moreover, Science and Technology support us to overcome such as threats, diseases. It is no secret that the pandemic "Coronavirus" had spread worldwide and a great number of people have fought with this threat. In that situation Chinese scientists have invented equipment to determine this virus. So, I believe that science and technology have more opportunities to use human life. To sum up, although History shows the path toward our next life, I think Science and Technology have more positive impact on human beings.
Nowadays, pupil can study a
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is one of the best fields that will
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help
us know about our past and build our future.
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that, force of gravity has
been invented
by Isaac Newton.
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by his book which preserved from ancient times.
Also
,
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History
provides us with a great number of information which we can
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use
in our future. The world population has already known about World War I and World War II and its devastating consequences.
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,
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History
provides us with examples that what is
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and what is correct.

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and
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support us to overcome such as threats, diseases. It is no secret that the pandemic
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had spread worldwide and a great number of
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have fought with this threat. In that situation Chinese scientists have invented equipment to determine this virus.
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, I believe that
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science
and
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technology
have more opportunities to
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use
human life.

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shows
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IELTS essay It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife while there are other problems that are more important v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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