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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of change outweigh the disadvantages? v.3

It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of change outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3
The one constant thing in our life is change. It is frequently argued that the changes are more beneficial to individuals than the preventing it happening. I completely believe that the positive effects of change are more greater than the disadvantages. This essay will discuss the advantages of having a new perspective life and drawbacks. On the one hand, Flexibility is an important and desirable quality in a person and change can produce that quality. Simply, living in a new place is difficult, but we learn the language or the culture or even just the easiest route to the grocery store, because we are able to adapt to changes. This adaptability makes us a stronger person, Flexibility is not good only personal life, it is also useful in professional as well. For instance, Just look at any business that has been around for more than a decade, the changes that business had to go through. From implementing Internet services to going paperless, companies need to make changes in order to focus more customers and clients. On the other hand, the main drawbacks of the change is that it brings discomfort for some people. The main reason is those people are feeling comfortable when they use particular clothes and tool and they do not want to change. For example, many people choose to wear clothes from particular brand and they feel inconvenient. This happens when people use their clothes for a long time. The new thing can make a discomfort, but people have an ability to adapt different things and they can very soon accept the changes. In conclusion, although there are disadvantageous of flexibility, such as difficulty to adapt new things. There are many benefits of taught a change and it change and it teaches people new skills and experience.
The one constant thing in our life is
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change
. It is
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argued that the
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changes
are more beneficial to individuals than the preventing it happening. I completely believe that the
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positive
effects of
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change
are
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more greater
than the disadvantages. This essay will discuss the advantages of having a
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new
perspective life and drawbacks.

On the one hand, Flexibility is an
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important
and desirable quality in a person and
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change
can produce that quality.
Simply
, living in a
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new
place is difficult,
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but
we learn the language or the culture or even
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just
the easiest route to the grocery store,
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because
we are able to adapt to
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changes
. This adaptability
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makes
us a stronger person, Flexibility is not
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good
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only
personal life, it is
also
useful in professional
as well
.
For instance
,
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Just
look at any business that has been around for more than a decade, the
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changes
that business had to go through. From implementing Internet services to going paperless,
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companies
need to
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make
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changes
in order to focus more customers and clients.

On the other hand
, the main drawbacks of the
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change
is that it brings discomfort for
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some
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people
. The main reason is those
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people
are feeling comfortable when they
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use
particular clothes and
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tool and
they do not want to
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change
.
For example
,
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many
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people
choose to wear clothes from particular
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brand and
they feel inconvenient. This happens when
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people
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use
their clothes for a long time. The
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new
thing can
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make
a discomfort,
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but
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people
have an ability to adapt
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different
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things and
they can
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very
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soon
accept the
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changes
.

In conclusion
, although there are disadvantageous of flexibility, such as difficulty to adapt
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new
things. There are
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many
benefits of taught a
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change
and it
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change
and it teaches
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people
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new
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skills
and experience.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of change outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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