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It is said that, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books. 'Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? Give reasons for your answer and v.3

It is said that, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books. 'Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? 3
Nowadays, it is very common to travel or work during and after the educational period. Mostly people prefer to do such activities when they got 6 months or 12 months of free time. Although travel doesn't limit for rich people, the most common person is also travelling also travel as per their economic strength. There are always positive and negative sides of everything both views are discussed as follows. One of the biggest advantages is by travelling or working, people have become more active mentally and physically which ultimately helpful for them. During the work, people have lots of experience, whether it is good or bad, but they learn a lot, which will help them in future corporate sectors. On the other hand, while travelling; it is the most interesting way of learning by observation and the exposure of new cultures and people. For instance, one of my cousin brothers used to travel a lot because during the journey he has faced lots of difficulties and challenge self-limitations which makes him extend his own limitations, so ultimately he has developed or learned about himself after completion of the trip, so for him each journey reveals his new interpersonal skills. On the negative side, some people have become habitual for shorter trips just for fun or change of mind, although they don’t have enough financial strength and due to that, it becomes one of the root causes of problems in a family. Similarly, another adverse effect is, some students have worked after school and as they got a regular income so they do not prefer to complete their education and get the degree certificate. In conclusion, I firmly believe that young people should be encouraged to break their boundaries also they should aware of the importance of educational certificate in order to get better future opportunities.
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or work during and after the educational period.
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people
prefer to do such activities when they
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got
6 months or 12 months of free time. Although
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travel
doesn't limit for rich
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people
, the most common person is
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travelling
also
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travel
as per their economic strength. There are always
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positive
and
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negative
sides of everything both views
are discussed
as follows.

One of the biggest advantages is by travelling or working,
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people
have become more active mentally and
physically
which
ultimately
helpful for them. During the work,
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people
have
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lots
of experience, whether it is
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good
or
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bad
,
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but
they learn a
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lot
, which will
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help
them in future corporate sectors.
On the other hand
, while travelling; it is the most interesting way of learning by observation and the exposure of new cultures and
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people
.

For instance
, one of my cousin brothers
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travel
a
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because
during the journey he has faced
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lots
of difficulties and challenge self-limitations which
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makes
him extend his
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own
limitations,
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so
ultimately
he has developed or learned about himself after completion of the trip,
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so
for him each journey reveals his new interpersonal
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skills
.

On the
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negative
side,
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some
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people
have become habitual for shorter trips
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just
for fun or
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change
of mind, although they don’t have
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enough
financial strength and due to that, it becomes one of the root causes of problems in a family.
Similarly
, another adverse effect is,
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some
students have worked after school and as they
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got
a regular income
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so
they do not prefer to complete their education and
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get
the degree certificate.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that young
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people
should
be encouraged
to break their boundaries
also
they
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should aware
of the importance of educational certificate in order to
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get
better future opportunities.
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Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay It is said that, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books. 'Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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